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such things



on earthin' truths
heaven, of the most

unlikely

greyed stoned
stairs

an angel

touching ground

feeling it
with the throw

of rose petals

there is a garden
in the clouds

growing

for such
things










A contest entry

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  • Nam
    June 1, 2008
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    It starts off sort of weak, I feel you could tweak the beginning to be more in-line with the rest of the poem, the fluidity, and word choice; the middle part, and ending are well done, it's just the beginning that seems to be a rough start.

    A nice poem that you have written here.

    -Nam


  • peridotPixi
    March 31, 2008

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    yeah i think this was great at the decription of what you see in the picture, it flows niceley, good luck in the contest and keep writing, -Amy


  • LadyDementia gold member
    March 30, 2008

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    Wonderfully done, our first thoughts are usually the best ones. As you have shown here. All the best in the contest


  • Unsigned gold member
    March 30, 2008

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    It is better than half decent me thinks....Itook the same approach...

    Well written Poet...

    Simon


  • Angelflower
    March 30, 2008

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    huh.. This was really interesting.. It did come out decent.
    I liked it.. It was very unusual.. But the way you interpeted the picture was unique..
    Well done..
    Jetleena

    • wendymolly
      March 30, 2008
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      ty! I feel honored that you enjoyed reading!
      take care,
      ~pithyAplomb.

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