crystal tears stream slowly down his face
for he has lost what can not be replaced
shaking and cold he silently stands
alone in a corner, his face in his hands
"I love you so much" you could hear him say
as he walked slowly by and left his bouquet
now his red rimmed eyes look to the floor
as he thinks of the person he once so adored
A contest entry
- Get It Uffing Out Already ! by candyknife.
800 points, ended April 10, 20 entries
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Comments
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awww. me no like this one at all
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omg this is so deep!
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A heartbreaking piece. You can sense the emotion in this poem, all those feelings of what you feel came across really well with this piece. It flows beautifully Dustin, well done
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Just wow! Very deep.
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Wow..
aww
Oh my god Dustee
This is so sad Such a good write though, so much emotion captured in this peice. My favorite were the last two, it ended it perfectly, so sadthough
But still an amazing poem
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Heartbreaking
A really goed poem that really pulls at your heartstrings. Its hard losing someone you care about whether it be from death or just them walking away. Yopu've portrayed that well. bravo Dusty
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sad
this is heartfelt and very expressive
i especially liked the 2nd stanza
its a bit ambiguous but very nice
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