If silence is golden will it then
illuminate the path ahead
As each day passes will it then
bring us closer to thine death
How doth the winds blow
north south east and west
Second by second the clock spins
thine body mind nor soul will rest
Thou who seekest thee shall find
I'm which is attain'd at the end of desires
All our fate's intertwined
as day by day our destiny transpires
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A contest entry
- Your Maverick Prewrites . . . by RatherImaginative.
925 points, ended October 16, 2008, 67 entries
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This is a pleasant, thoughtful piece, though it brings with it a sense of urgency -- our time is running out, and some of us cannot see to follow the path we should, a sentiment captured beautifully in the first two lines. I have a question about the apostrophe after "Thou" in line 9, for it doesn't appear to really be needed. Thanks so much for entering my contest!
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golden...
It's more along the line's of being a good thing it's not the fact it shine's . It's the good thing's in my opinion that help you deal with the bad. which in turn shed's light on the path. I just used golden as a metophor -
oh, id love to hear you read this... its has such a melodic feel to it. very nice.
just one question, though; why would gold shine or be a source of light? its kind of a dark metal to me. -
Nicely done. This is a great poem.
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great job.
Liked how you penned this.
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Oh so that's how the applause thing works...
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Ooooh look! Applause...*click*
The title rocks.
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