a young woman walks down a dirt lane
trips on a rock and stubbles to her old worn knees
she bows her head taking it as a sign from above
she closes her eyes and relives her life in flashes
she could almost smell her mothers baked pies
almost taste the cooked fish by the stream
could almost feel her first lover
as if she was laying on that blanket
feeling the pleasure and the pain all over again
she decides that her life might have been a hard one
but the things she has done and seen
have only made her into the strong woman
that the world has molded her to become
as the last flashes of her life desert her
she gets up off her worn out knees
and heads towards her home
to her kids, her high school sweetheart
and to the pets that her kids have accumulated
back to the life she wouldnt change
for even a million dollars
for that home this life
this is what god gave her
and this is what she can deal with
one step at a time
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please let me know what you think for i have put my heart on my sleeve in this one
Comments
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I love this as you created a life and let us see it - it's like a book, in a poem ... hard to do but you managed it!
thanks for entering
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terrific write
what more can say, the flow and imagery are terrific. -
This poem flows better than any poem Ive ever read. The story-like style is refreshing and I enjoyed the journey "desides" should be "decides"
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Its really good Laura. It shows a sense of tiredness and hints of unspoken tragedy. (Did I really just say that) It also shows a strenth of character in the young woman as well as in the writer. I love how you end the poem as well. With a sence of contentment and happiness that makes all that the charachter has been through seem worth where she is at now. Great poem.
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