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Beautiful Lady

When i first saw you 
I couldnt believe my eyes
you are so beautiful
I believe my breath actually stopped
and that my heart actually skipped.
I think this is a dream
I hope it isnt
But if it is
don't pinch me 
I dont want to wake up and lose sight of you.
I hope i really am seeing this
you...
Beautiful Lady
skin so pale
hair so dark
eyes so cold
the very embodiment of an angel should look like is what you appear to be
please please please
Beautiful Lady
Dont be the devil in disguise
Instead be the friend i've been longing to meet
I know nothing of you
Beautiful Lady
except that you are a thief

because

you stole my heart

hopefully i get to be my own heroine

and i shall chase you across the skies to retireve it.

My Lady

i will cross the world

in a stolen heartbeat

to see you smile

and now i hear someone calling my name

is it you?

no i fear not

It is some insignificant dot...

Goodbye

My Beautiful Lady

you are the angel that will haunt my dreams

and i await the day you speak to me...

 

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  • DrunkenRam
    March 30, 2008

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    This paints a strange image in my mind, maybe it's just me but, I see a man staring at a statue and thinking these things.
    as far as the write goes, You could try to not use the reference "I" too much, change it up a bit, still refer to yourself, but find other avenues aside from the word "I".
    Juwst a thought, but what do I know, I'm just a Farm Animal with a drinking problem


  • Kassandra Nyktos
    March 30, 2008

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    good write, a bit...I don't know.....sappy in my opinion, but honestly, I like it, and I think you should continue to write poetry like this. It caught my attention.


    Kass