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What is this? Guilt? Distress?

You know the feeling when you did something that you regret
the heavy weight on your chest
weighing you down, body and soul
and you feel a deluge of distress?

And you want to undo the past and correct the wrong
to make everything right once more
and get rid of this atrocious feeling
that you didn't have before.

It starts to diminish slowly
and yet you can't shake the feeling
the guilt that overcomes you, that devours you entirely
the wrong that you're concealing.

Until you right the wrong and repent or whatnot
you can still feel the weight on your body and soul
unable to get the matter of your mind
no matter how hard you try, you're losing your control.

This weight is driving you up the wall
you can't ignore it any longer, can't put it off anymore
it's clawing at you, threatening to overpower you
it's like an agonizing mental war.

Trying to find a way to repent
you apologize, you help, and you give
but nothing fills this void of guilt and distress
this weight, that devours you, you cannot live.

Author notes

I don't really feel this way though, so yeah....
well sometimes I may say a bad comment or something and I feel this guilt and w/e but after I apologize or something, it goes away =D

So what did you guys this of my 2nd poem? Too common? Too strange? Good, bad?

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  • know one
    April 3, 2008
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    Awesome I love some of the meterphores you used it gave the poem depth exerlent write!


  • Nakatrea
    March 30, 2008

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    its not too common nor strange. My only complaint is that you reused your words. and ruined it kind of by saying "donate to charity" well hat is probably how i would have described it too R. good job!