You said you loved me
Then walked away
I watched you
You eyes were dull and guilty
When I asked what whats wrong
You turned away
I asked again
You repiled "nothing"
But can I believe you
You were gone the other night
When I asked where you were
You said at the gym
But I didn't believe you
I want to believe you
I really do
But with the way you do things
It is hard to do
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Squeeky
A contest entry
- TITLES BY THE MILLIONS by Blooming Poet.
300 points, ended April 18, 2008, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love AND PAIN by Ben and Brook.
300 points, ended April 28, 2008, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Is that ok???
Comments
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This was so nice and the ending was lovely, I like poems that are ended well, the end is very important. I liked this and enjoyed the read.
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The dance of the young
Often in reading others work it brings back to my mind of how the ones in my younger days played life all along .They used such trickery as to keep one dangling onm a string just in case the other didnt work out he could waltz back in. good write here
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haha awesome! it reminds me of hudson, the loser! I cant belive he cheated on me hes a horse lard! but I like it, its soo emiontila!
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wow! >.< this was simple and very impactful! a heart-breaking poem with so much sorrow and pain! amazingly written... keep penning!
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Ah.. The pain.. I can feel it lifted from the words I see....
It's short but to the point. I like it. Keep up the great work. -
yes thats exactly the kind of poem I'm looking for in this contest. I want there to be love within the poem but there is always that doubt of that fear or that pain i Love it good job
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This title I gave you is very personal for me, because i am going through this and you gave me exactly what I was looking for. something I can relate to and I can 100% Good work
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Awww cool! yay i didn't even know that and i wrote a poem about it cool!! well thanks for the title!
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just one word....WOW!! you truly can pen!
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yea good honey
you got real potential babe keep up your good writeing and u can go a long way. u have got a lot of skill u can make it out there honey xx
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Thanks sooooooo much like thanks times a millon!!! That's really nice of you!
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