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Just a Toy

Elegant cuts run up your naked body
Circling around your breasts and up your neck, stopping at your mouth

Shaking and rattling the chains that bind
Fear running a cold sweat down the back of your neck as your muffled cries echoe through the hollow room

Soon, a stainless steel death awaits you
A gunshot to tease a second to wound and watch your warm blood run down your curves

You beg for your life
I just sit and watch as you cry, making up excuses to spare your life
You have kids, a husband, and a family

I don't give a shit
Your just my toy and nothing more

Then.........darkness
A black cloth gently covers your eyes
The cold steel of something round pressing hard against the back of your head
And BAM!
A glorious display of blood and brains shower the floors and wall

You twitch, then go limp, then silence
I turn away cleaning your blood off my gun for my next victim

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  • Rheea gold member
    May 19, 2008

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    twenty one and lets lock you up why not shoot a man ? all you men like to do is kill women you are scared of each other?


  • Brooklynn Tainted gold member
    April 1, 2008
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    wow a little scary and really good