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Black Raven Manor

Dove's flutter, in startled hurried flight, and black raven,

leaving their overgrown gardens plush safe haven,

surrounding hidden, ivy covered, castle walls stones
for centuries in caliginous foggy seclusions dreary graveyard bones.

Here within dark forest rumored evil cryptic hounds
lies medieval Black Raven Manor, Mister Wolf owner
of estate grounds,.

Magazines journalist, pretty, Ms Deflore,

knocked, nervously, on the large wooden entry way door.
It swung open slowly, revealing a dark figure of a man, well groomed

Red fireplace embers glowed behind him, in the otherwise darkened room.

You must be....,

striking a match and lighting a candle wick dance

windows framed in burgundy-red, velvet drapes and crowned valance;
crystal stemware sat atop a bar of carved wood Gothic faces, with expressions of pain.
An antiquated
pearls and gold filigree framed mirror reflections of insane.

Mr. wolf's fingers caressed her bare shoulders removing her wrap
chills shivered through her body, hardly a word spoken, to tap

He presumed to pour her a sifter of cognac triumph, his eyes penetrating,
Keeping her faith that all the rumors of occult were fictitious ventilating.

 

He took her for a tour in the dimly lit castle corridors,

and he continued talking about the village maidens who were prisoners and more....
"would you care to view the dungeon it is in excellent repair?"
swinging a creaking door open to descending spiral stairs
wall chains and shackles, dungeon cells and eerie cold air draft.

"Stories say that guilotine blocks still bleed from the blades severing craft ,"

 

The Magazine received a lengthy report by mail concerning
resignation enclosed, saying she wouldn't be returning,
police called on Mr Wolf, "she wasn't there," he claimed;
rumors continue about Raven Manor, little is known,
and nobody knows where Ms Deflore has gone.



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Now, for the WORD BANK:


Mirror Velvet Dove(s)
Embers Burgundy Faith
Stones Pain Bleed
Ivy Crystal Pearls



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  • Jack22
    April 9, 2008
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    this reminds me of a Poe style poem... i loved it!

    Jack


  • Ktulu Blackwolfe silver member
    April 8, 2008

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    This is well done. I liked the darkness I read in this, and the flow as well.

    Thanks for the entry and good luck

    **Ktulu Blackwolfe**


  • Randomly Beautiful
    April 5, 2008

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    I do believe the rules were ten lines. The piece is good as is; but per rules should be edited. Best wishes.


  • Dalaney gold member
    April 3, 2008

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    omg...this is fabulous...please don't shoot me, but the contest asked for ten lines.....(running for cover)
    Love, Lane

  • carole21
    April 1, 2008

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    somber

    good somber write for the prompt and a good story . . liked "reflections of insane" and "fictitious ventilating" . . best of luck in the contest . .


  • jamiedoring
    March 30, 2008
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    Holy cow that is quite the write. Fantastic rhyme and wording and I loved the story. EXCELLENT.


  • dustookie2
    March 30, 2008

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    WWOOOOOO i do enjoy a walk on the dark side .... the title brought images of a dark sinister place...you held the attention and suspension just waiting for a blood curdling scream chill the bones even more......you spin a good yarn and hold it through to the ending which was a nice touch. Brilliant use of the wordbank well constructed ... entertaining reading Good luck in the contest.

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