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Clouds

Happiness is a cloud
That one can easily fall through
One little nudge
In the wrong way
One misstep
One wrong turn
Can lead to pain
Hit the ground
Harder that before

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  • evilbatwoman
    March 29, 2008
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    I do believe "that" should be "than" in the last line. I understand.


  • Internecine
    March 29, 2008
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    This is really a strong write for someone your age, well done.

    Typo: 'That' instead of 'Than'.