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The music in me

Missing image

The smooth vanilla

music flows like cream

behind lightning storms

of ruby love

 

like blankets of fire

catching sinful rays in the

glitter of orchestrated chords

underneath dual personalities 

 

I ride a breath of wind

in drops of light as the

sky dances in paper thin

emotions

 

sailing through the air like

a colored balloon, delicate

like petals of a rose

 

a photo inside my mind erupts

following this journey  

I command like a goddess

behind this quill

scattering soft notes,

releasing the music within

 

 

 

 

3/29/08 

Author notes

Artist of picture unknown, found at photobucket
Prompt: combined picture and Word bank - all words used
vanilla, smooth, catch(ing), glitter, goddess, cream, lightening, sail, balloon, love, ruby, dance, rose, paper, quill, blanket, releas(ing), fire, photo, music

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Comments

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  • amaranthine lover gold member
    May 1, 2008
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    "lighting" should be lightning

    I like this piece, nicely done


    • zochit2me gold member
      May 1, 2008
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      Wow...I have read this like a million times and that whizzed right past me. Thanks so much for catching that and thanks also for the honor of silver.

      Becky

  • piccola silver member
    April 20, 2008
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    wow! that graphic is just too bizarre. I couldn't get it out of my mind as I read.

  • New-n-Improved
    April 17, 2008

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    "a photo inside my mind erupts

    following this journey

    I command like a goddess

    behind this quill

    scattering soft notes,

    releasing the music within"

    These are the kind of words that I look for when I'm reading a poem. Your words are soft and they have a purpose. You are very talented and I like your style. Keep up the good work. Keep writing and I'll keep reading.


  • toomysterious
    April 15, 2008
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    Extremely beautiful and lyrical


  • forever.earth
    April 5, 2008

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    Beautiful!
    I really enjoyed reading this.

    I ride a breath of wind

    in drops of light as the

    sky dances in paper thin

    emotions

    My favourite part!
    Good luck in the contest


  • grannyeri gold member
    April 4, 2008

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    What an unusual picture prompt this is, and the word bank combination of words too - you have fit them together so well - liked the flow and interpretation you wrote.


  • Desire gold member
    April 4, 2008

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    Wow!!

    Oh My!!
    Powerful images You have brought forth Beautiful
    Wonderful use of the Word Bank~~
    Love this

    Keep that quill dancing...
    Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    March 31, 2008

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    Vanilla is flowing through my mind as I read this wonderful write, you have created a flowing smooth tale that makes me smile in delight

    ♥
    Thank you & Best of luck
    Stay safe
    ~Manda


  • aliceramone
    March 31, 2008
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    great imagery here and I especially love the imagery in the first stanza...a great piece.


  • individuality gold member
    March 30, 2008

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    vanilla - second time i have read this word today, maybe i need some ice cream lol a coloured balloon i am just watchign sort of listening to around the world in 80 days film a good poem


  • Dragomiloff
    March 30, 2008
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    Whoa...I agree with Layne, the third stanza is a knock-out. Awesome.


  • lilAj
    March 30, 2008

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    wow, loved it- amazing flow, fluid Imagery and your metaphors are quite stunning

    nicely done
    ~aj~


  • Layne
    March 29, 2008

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    "I ride a breath of wind
    in drops of light as the
    sky dances in paper thin
    emotions"

    -I love the thought of riding a breath of wind........amazing Becky, just amazing


    -Love Layne


  • cheaphotelsign
    March 29, 2008

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    wow! a sensual journey of sweet tastes and soft textures...i adore the beginning. strong feminine power here...made me feel like a "natural woman"...you're so very good at what you do...a brilliant write, beautiful and elegant.


  • Randomly Beautiful
    March 29, 2008

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    Well it's nice to see you here. This is written beautifully as always my dear. It's amazing how one picture can inspire so many differet takes. Best wishes...


    Trina.


  • oldschooldee1
    March 29, 2008
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    this is beautiful thanks for sharing...

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