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Painful Birthing

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   This poem I am writing on a bumpy tablecloth

   has the audacity to give itself birth at a workshop

   dinner group, one which I was not really invited to,

   but came to, all the same.

  

   It claims to need its own height, up here

   on our Fridays-at-Flaxton barn-storming,

   our erudite poetry readings, with superb views

   of hills, ocean, fields and more hills.

  

   At this point someone sneezes, another wheezes.

   It is April. On my second page with this thing

   [and no one knows I am writing it … ]they think

   I am checking finances and correspondence. 

  

   Truly, this is a work with a finger in its ear

   and a tug at a beard. A work of delayed wisdom.

   It has the stamp of a ring of Shiraz to tone down

   sobriety, of which there is much as words spill.

  

   The poem is becoming a liability, a fugitive

   hiding beneath two villanelles and a bush ballad.

   A guest speaker pipes up as I scribble: ‘Poetry

   comes in the middle of the night’, she intones,

 

   ‘… even I have risen at 2am to get down my muse.

   Poetic thought is a work recollected (in tranquillity?).

   No, she insists ‘silence’. Well, I ... I am a midwife with

   lots to write and little to say. I stop writing …

 

   add these words later. ‘Your turn,” a lady insists.

   I read a poem by Billy Collins. Australia will not

   boast a poet Laureate so Billy suits my poem (and me) fine!

   I read his “Today” and then gaze at “a larger dome of blue.”

 

  This poem I have written on a bumpy tablecloth

  may well disown me, but it is born. You read its words.

  It is not a marvel. It will not move Shakers or Quakers.

  Yet, despite me, it insists it is a poem and not doggerel.

 

  As for me, I am a scrivener, hardly worthy of holding onto

  the coattails of Frost, Auden, Eliot and Yeats.

  They would never have given birth to a poem

  at a poetry dinner in a rural barn.

 

  Contrarily, this poem gave birth to itself.

  Undress it once. Then cover it up.

  It will otherwise blush for its nakedness. 

 

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       A  BIRTHING, EARLY  MORNING

  

 

   This poem I am writing on a Sunday morning

   has the blessing of my wife, to give itself birth.

     It claims to need its own height, up here

   on the Range, in our cool mountain airs.

  

   Nothing erudite, just a morning with superb views

   of epithets, lines, stanzas and more lines.

   At this point the radio bursts forth. A beautiful bass voice

   sings, "The beautiful, the beautiful the River."

  

   It is April. My words are gathering swiftly 

   at this river, flowing by the throne of Ted Hughes.

   I am checking emails for any correspondence. 

   Truly, this is a work with a finger out of its ear

  

   and a tug at a beard. A work of forthright wisdom.

   It has the stamp of a ring of Shiraz to tone down

   sobriety, of which there is much, as words spill.

   The poem is becoming an addiction. I place it,

  

   a fugitive hiding beneath two villanelles

   and a bush ballad. It may be a poetic thought

     recollected (in tranquillity?) Well, I ...

   I am a midwife with lots to write and little to say.

 

   I stop writing ... add these words later.                 

   I read a poem by Billy Collins. Australia will not, can not

   boast a poet Laureate, so Billy suits my poem (and me) fine!

   I read his “Today” and then gaze at “a larger dome of blue”.

 

   This poem I have written on a Sunday morning

   may well disown me, but it is born. You read its words.

   It could be a marvel ... move Shakers or Quakers.

   Yet, as my wife assures me, it is a poem, not doggerel.

 
  Contrarily, this poem gave birth to itself.

  Undress it. Then cover it up.

  It will otherwise blush for its audacity.

  Oh! I am late for St. Mary's Communion.

    

Author notes

My depression is that I cannot get away from my impulsive muse and therefore I write dreadful poetry. These verses were born in unusual circumstances. This is the norm for me and I am despondent about that. You can see why if you read even some of the lines!.

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  • Dienush
    April 6, 2008

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    Wow, I really like the light, conversational yet intellectual tone to these poems. They both form one whole and I love it how they're almost the same and yet there are only a few differences that make them opposite... I love this. I too write more than I should sometimes, lol, but I recall what a university professor once told me during a young writers' union. He said that we should write a lot, hundreds and hundreds of poems, especially because not everything we write will be worthy... so the more we write, the more chances we give ourselves to compose a masterpiece. I really enjoyed this entry, thanks so much for taking up the challenge. I hope you continue to write as much, because you really have something of value for your readers.

    ~Diana


  • Jarrod
    April 1, 2008

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    quite the different write from what I normally see.. I do like the use of famous poets. I think the flow is a bit strange at times and the piece itself can be a little more tightened despite all the "choas" going on in the background... I would like to re-read this piece if it ever gets deedited... so let me know if it ever does!


  • paperparadox silver member
    March 30, 2008

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    Bah! The only bits not worthy of being included in this poem are the slights against yourself as a poet!

    You have some fabulous lines in here:

    'It claims to need its own height, up here'

    'The poem is becoming a liability, a fugitive
    hiding beneath two villanelles and a bush ballad.'

    These two in particular are quite spectacular and bring a humming vibrancy to your reader's poetic taste buds ~ rather like a scrumptious blast of sherbet on the tongue.

    Lovely words here, dear Poet. I was breathing in that unforgettable view as I read.


  • myrataal silver member
    March 30, 2008

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    Ah RON!

    Halfway through the poem I got dementia, and forgot that you are the writer, for you Muse took over so strongly! It is fresh and amazing and very poetic, with much wry undertones and OVERTURES if you know what I mean!

    To be specific: I loved the many rivulets flowing in all directions and then coming together to murmur its exit line ...



    No do not try to minimize your talent. Your poem just winked the whole time while I read ... I think it heard me giggle, and felt the wet on my eyelids!
    '

    Love
    Myra


  • HaleyMary
    March 29, 2008

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    This wasn't dreadful at all. I thought it flowed quite well and it had wonderful imagery. I think it's always amazing that people can write a poem about writing. I could never do that. I always need a topic in mind to write about first. I think you have much talent. Best of luck in the contest.


  • frownsnfreckles
    March 29, 2008

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    well I love poems like this Lyndon, they do birth themselves while we muse, from time to time, on what goes on around us with a politely bored and somewhat distracted air, thank goodness!!!


  • Lady Altheia gold member
    March 29, 2008

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    I doubt you are despondent. Poems can come to life any time and any place. Myu first poem came to life at a writer's group because I was too scared to read my story.

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