Oh to be in Belfast on a fine summers day
Walking through the little streets were the happy
children are at play swinging round the lamp posts
Or playing with old tyres throwing stones at empty cans the game goes on for hours
Catchy kiss or traffic lights are a few that I recall
Playing with the super balls bouncing of the walls
Rubber bands around your feet to jump and twist and play then came the old skipping rope and all the rhymes you say
Of course there's lots of football the boys will insist that this is the first thing we put on the list hopscotch and hoopla and some tennis just for fun
Then a game of hide and seek were everybody runs there is always tag and rounders
A bit like cricket you know just an old stick and a can and of we go
Those were the days in Belfast when I was a child all the happy faces kids new how to smile we didn't have much money but our days were filled with joy
We made our own amusement every girl and boy
A contest entry
- A Stroll Down Memory Lane (PW welcome) by thepoetsings.
700 points, ended August 2, 2008, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Childhood Memories, Good or Bad by Nicada.
550 points, ended July 11, 2008, 38 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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I stand by the first thing I said in my previous comment. I like the direction you took this in, though...sometimes it's fun just to think about all the games you played as a child. Thanks for sharing the childhood memories
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These are some nice memories of the carefree days of childhood. I can relate to many of these wonderful activities. It was always easy to entertain ourselves with just a few simple toys. Thanks for entering my contest. Blessings, Patty
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A few editorials to help out...
- I see you didn't use any punctuation in this piece...I respect that decision as an artistic device, but there are a couple places where you might capitalize just to delineate the end of one sentence from the beginning of another (lines 7?, 8, 9, and 11).
- lines 2 and 9. "were" -> "where"
- lines 6 and 10. "of" -> "off"
- line 11. "new" -> "knew"
I'll be back to comment when judging. Thank you for entering!
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