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Finding 8:37

Missing image

Let the mind go blank,
I say,
Figure out why you're smiling.

Nothing comes to mind.
Air is thick with greasy seafood.
(Last sip of Kendall-Jackson grape.)
Ah yes, now write a few more lines.

Had to buy the drink myself.
Nobody sang that stupid song.
No flaming mound of chocolate.
Suddenly, I still don't own a watch. 

Outside myself, to be precise,

(plus or minus several minutes),
at present, I have:
     this table by the fence,
     the last few minutes of my 20's,
     no idea whatsoever,
     no more Chardonnay.

Take a long, deep-
                            
fried breath.
Look up, and

                     miss the sky.

But many miles of night below,
high, dry, and blind within its sanctum
there glows a timid shade of white
beneath a galvanized parasol.
Both share a common bolt
atop a headless, former spruce
that was felled in Mississippi
about half my life ago.

Floodlight overflows the gutter,
cascades down onto an umbrella,
which sprouts from, and shelters,
a table on the terrace
of one particular watering hole,
whose owner really isn't Joe.
Listless nothing in the shade.
(So I rest my head against Joe's fence.)

And about a foot above the fishnet
nailed to the awning for effect,
there is precisely one spot—
situated              just so,
between light post and eaves trough—
where, by white, incandescent backlight,
plain sight is mine alone.

The spider gazes back.
Welcome.
Far away in Napa Valley,
fruit grows ripe on a vine.
I greet my party's only guest,
who savors the moment.

And maybe it’s 8:37,
like three decades ago;
and maybe the air
is really just old songs.
Maybe I don't need a cake
if I know how to taste chocolate.
Maybe I grant my own wishes. 
Blow out thirty years of candles.

I feel a breeze I've never felt
fill the skin I've never worn
full as the moon I've never seen,
and I look out into everywhere.

Just like that,
Here I am, too.


Author notes


I was born at 8:37PM. My thirtieth year was the worst year of my life. Both my marriage and my career went up in smoke over the course of about 3 months, and I had no idea who I was afterwards. This poem was written during the 25 or so minutes surrounding the stroke of my 30th birthday, which, ironically, was the best of them all. I wrote it on a couple of sheets from a waiter's order pad as I sat all alone on the patio at Joe's Crab Shack. Hitting rock-bottom was the best thing that ever happened to me. The way it felt to suddenly discover that I exist is pretty impossible to describe.

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  • rawr41507
    June 11
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    i like it =]
  • interesting pen

    Some of this poem i didn't really understand but maybe I just need to mature more as a poet I am only 19. But this poem really made me think about where I am going to be in 10 or 11 years. I hope I am happy then. BTW I love how you ended your poem!!!

  • http://allpoetry.com/contest/show/2404559
    Congrats you have made it [ast the audition
  • Do you think that if I added you to the preliminary list to go on to next round you would make it? I mean make it as in write the poem etc?

    • JustBe gold member
      May 5
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      Among other things, that depends on when the next round ends, I suppose. I never can tell when it comes to that sort of thing, because I am not one who can force my muse to just produce. Sometimes I go months with nothing, sometimes I post multiple poems in the same week. I can say that I will make time to pick up pen and paper and see what comes, but I cannot promise that I'll wind up with something I would call a poem.

  • rhondasail
    April 30

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    Happy belated...amazing observations in tiniest detail...I found the spider's stare to be the most powerful image of stark reality I've ever read...Glad this won a gold, and apparently, a bronze too. Peace, Rhonda


    • JustBe gold member
      May 2
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      The writing of this poem makes the short list of most important experiences in my life. It is certainly the most important piece of writing I have ever composed. I can read it and re-live the moment when I first discovered myself. To receive a compliment like that on this poem.... I don't think I can really convey how satisfying that is. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment.
  • dewbee
    April 17

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    free spirit

    i enjoyed this because it was immediate, almost stream-of-consciouseness writing which i used to do a lot when i was most in the flow... thankyou this was refreshing.


  • myrataal silver member
    March 30
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    I really really think I read this one before!

    Really really

    Did you change your username? I have read thousands of poems over the last six years and I think my memory is not too bad.

    But then.

    Perhaps I dreamt it.
    Nevertheless, a stunning read. As I said before.

    Love
    Myra


    • JustBe gold member
      March 30
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      Nope.

      Didn't change my user name, and yes, you did read this before. I entered it previously in Rob's contest "Better than My Stuff," and it won a bronze trophy. This version is actually heavily edited relative to the original. I pulled a lot of work awhile back to submit for publication, but I have no bites yet, and I've decided I'm not satisfied with most of them, anyway. Therefore, I have just re-posted a bunch of old stuff as pre-writes, and entered some of it in contests, in the hope that someone will feel up to taking a good whack at it. I actually have a couple more I'm going to put up a bit later.
      Thanks for your good eye, though, Myra. Plagiarism is a rotten thing, and I post so seldom, I'd be pretty pissed if someone stole my work.
      Best,
      Morgan

  • tryst 1
    March 29
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    a loon's call....

    ahh, JustBe...i hope you are never done with this one....i could re read it ad infinitum....the mood it creates is haunting, private, mournful, and introspective....i love the flavour of this poem. i love this poem. keep writing, and keep being....

    your friend who hasn't talked to you in forever....
    ~tryst

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