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Repeated Subtraction

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From their beginnings,

mortal gods created heaven on Earth.

On all seven days they rested,

and they felt that it was good.

And multiply they did.

Divide they did also,

until the fruitful hardly noticed

the milk and honey getting scarce.

They wrote books that made it holy

to pursue the goal of leisure—

to keep dividing amongst themselves,

for leisure's other name is progress.

Blessed are they, said the saints,

who turn nature into beauty.

Thus the wheel begat the wagon

begat the wonders of the world.


The tree of knowledge first was logged,

then genetically re-mastered;

sold as living room-sized hybrids

for the homes the rich ones built.

As they divided and divided,

progress multiplied and multiplied,

spread across the land,

rose up to dwell in heaven.


And the sun turned black as sackcloth.

And their fish and fowl went missing.

And they subtracted and subtracted,

until they finally equaled zero.

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From Stanley Kubrick's "2001: A Space Odyssey," 1968

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  • Nam
    June 6

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    "mortal gods created heaven on the Earth." - don't feel the use of "the" at the end is necessary.

    Seems like a longer poem but really doesn't need to be, works fine the way it is. A good poem that you have written here. Very insightful.

    -Nam

    • JustBe gold member
      June 9
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      Agree.

      I don't like "the" there, either. Thanks for your helpful input, and I'm glad you liked the poem.

  • rhondasail
    April 30
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    For some strange reason this has made me laugh uproariously...I suppose it's the total rationality of it...like that old TV serial, Dragnet, when Detective Friday would utter the words, 'Just the facts ma'am, just the facts'...loved it! Peace, Rhonda

  • very good good luck and thanks for the entry
  • scoff
    March 29

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    The irreverence is delightful

    as you skewer those who would, through the message of their actions, have us believe that taking is as good as giving and hoarding is the same is sharing.

    Eventually, if we don't change directions, it will come to naught. Yes, I mean zero.

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