The cat crept everywhere
Searching, searching for a mouse
Couldn't find one here, couldn't find one there
The cat crept everywhere
Even the grounds outside were bare
Nary one rodent around the house
The cat crept everywhere
Searching, searching for a mouse
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Option 12.The cat went here and there.
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A nicely turned triolet, though you've paraphrased the line rather than using the actual words. But it's a nice cheery result. Here's the original, which really is a fascinating poem, I hope you'll agree. Thanks for entering.
The Cat and the Moon W.B Yeats.
THE CAT went here and there
And the moon spun round like a top,
And the nearest kin of the moon
The creeping cat looked up.
Black Minnaloushe stared at the moon,
For wander and wail as he would
The pure cold light in the sky
Troubled his animal blood.
Minnaloushe runs in the grass,
Lifting his delicate feet.
Do you dance, Minnaloushe, do you dance?
When two close kindred meet
What better than call a dance?
Maybe the moon may learn,
Tired of that courtly fashion,
A new dance turn.
Minnaloushe creeps through the grass
From moonlit place to place,
The sacred moon overhead
Has taken a new phase.
Does Minnaloushe know that his pupils
Will pass from change to change,
And that from round to crescent,
From crescent to round they range?
Minnaloushe creeps through the grass
Alone, important and wise,
And lifts to the changing moon
His changing eyes.
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