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To Walk With You and Talk With You



I want to walk with you and talk with you
I want to laugh with you and cry with you
I want to sleep with you and dream with you
I am in love with you and only you.

I want to laugh with you and cry with you.
Allow your essence deep under my skin
I’ll sing of love true lost in eyes of blue.
Our concupiscence cannot be a sin.

I want to sleep with you and dream with you
till the day I breathe my very last breath.
Do what lovers do in ways that are new.
We can give all our bodies can bequeath

I am in love with you and only you.
There’s no one else who means as much to me
Strange how love grew in ways we never knew
In deep bliss I am stuck to you like glue.


I never want to be free.

Author notes

This poem is a mix or what I call a Triquatrain retourne. It repeats like a retourne four lines
that begin each of the next three stanzas.
However lines one through four  and lines 5-7 9 -11
13 and 15 have a double rhyme.
As the poem is rhymed aaaa abab acac adad

There are ten syllables instead of eight to add more depth and make the contest more complete.

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  • Kleroo
    June 8

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    Wow it flows so easy but it seems you put so much thought into this piece either way this came to you it is beautifully written KLEROO

  • delightfulmess silver member
    June 6
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    Stunning!!! I love it.. Very Romantic and endearing.

    Delila

  • luv2dream gold member
    June 5
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    It's Beautiful!!..Love the repetitions!


  • Kelli Marie gold member
    May 24

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    Oh, I really like this form, did you create it? No matter, the write is simply beautiful. It reads so soft, like a whisper of love. Very nice piece of poetry.
    Kelli

  • Mirthryl
    May 23

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    Interesting form. Excellent choices of first stanza lines, which blend seamlessly into the following stanzas. Is the final line assigned a part in the rhyme scheme, or a stand-alone summation of the write?
    Clearly written with much feeling. I did have to look up "concupiscence" for a definition.


  • sweetgirlwa silver member
    April 26

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    Wow I am completly confused by form poetry. I am in awe of the write itself though. I loved the beauty and honesty in the words. It is a wonderful feeling to have that in your life. Fantastic work.


  • PerfectImperfection silver member
    April 9

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    This is just an absolutely beautiful piece!!! Such depth of sincerity and beauty within these lines!

    The form is fresh and wonderfully flowing! Lovely write!!!


  • Amera gold member
    March 29

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    Wow! I've never seen a form like this and it's really cool! You penned it perfectly with meter, rhyme and a beautiful image. I'm impressed and I'm so happy I read it. Well done!

    Love,
    Amera

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