O Lord are you listening
Deafening sounds of life amid
Silent last breathe of a lonely child
Moaning of the elderly near end
Sounds of silence slipping away into eternal night
Bring them home Lord in your awesome care
Sounds of explosions on communities of the innocent
Cries for help when there is none
Tears of a child without caring parents
Sounds of pain from broken relationships
And of life all round
From wedding chapel bells
To the cry of newborn babes
Sounds of pride service of man
To gun shots inner city street wars
Sounds of greed power and money
Painful sounds of deceit
Yes sounds of life deafening
Broken hearted and the meek
Caregiver sounds of reward
Mass needs of the poor and low in stature
Sounds gather believers looking for the way
The sounds of no sound
Waiting for the boom
Sounds of the winners
And that of losers
O Lord when can we all come home
Sounds overtaking the mind
Mind overtaking the body
Is this our sign the end is near
Sounds of nonsense
Those sounds of reality
Backed by sounds of the absurd
Destruction side by side with construction
How long must we endure
The sounds of life
A contest entry
- Autobiography by Randomly Beautiful.
1750 points, ended April 24, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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like the editing Cant give you the other clappy people but i can give you 
think it is stronger and tighter more like you
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Thanks hun! I was tired when I wrote it the other night. Left it kinda unfinished. I like it better this way too! Thanks for the read and compliment! Don
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You did well without using the I; however there are quite a few repitions such as the. Not bad overall but could use a bit of an edit as far as filler words. Saying more with less, etc. Thank you for the entry.
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Thank you for the tip! Don
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The sounds of life.What is life and what is death I wonder.Perhaps it is we who should listen my friend but of course we never do.An interesting write, Ros
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Thank you Ros for the comment on this poem. I just had it in my mind. I appreciate the compliments on it too! A deep time for me I guess. Don
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The sounds of life from the soul to cty streets....an interesting take on the prompt. As the years pass and life's experiences grant us wisdom in hindsight I do see so much of the person you have shown to me. good luck in this contest.
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Thank you my dear friend for the comment and compliments on my poem. Don
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