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Black Man

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Insurgence of Light energy
dug through deepest core of earth
scooping up handfuls of carbon dirt
likened unto black coal and indigo sky
with ebony sprinkled stars mixed
molding, shaping breath-baked sculpt
seared through life's vortex
                                 first black seed
                                 womb of humanity


Come hold me close


allow my gentleness to wrap securely about
your bruised and beaten back
to soothe your bereft soul
You stand straight , poised, regal, and proud
defeating superimposed odds

No weapon formed that would make good

Empires still bow
even through troubled dejection You rise
Your partner succumbs to your whims--Black Man








Author notes

PROMPT:

1. Black Woman, Lines 10-19


Naked woman, dark woman
Ripe fruit with firm flesh, dark raptures of black wine,
Mouth that gives music to my mouth
Savanna of clear horizons, savanna quivering to the fervent
caress
Of the East Wind, sculptured tom-tom, stretched drumskin
Moaning under the hands of the conqueror
Your deep contralto voice is the spiritual song of the
Beloved.


Art Credit:

"Black Man" by Emigdio Vasquez Painter/Muralist

http://emigdiovasquezartist.tripod.com/id13.html






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  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    April 5, 2008

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    Absolutely magnificent, gal! I love your description of the creation of a fine, black man. And then your deep emotional connection to his plight and his strength and absolute resilience of spirit. Love the scriptural allusion that no weapon formed against me will prosper-perfectly fitting.

    The sensuality here is perfectly swooning and totally drew me in. A marvelous piece on so many levels.

    All the best to ya!

  • darrylblacksr
    April 4, 2008

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    Thanks for the tribute to the black man who for so long has seemed invisible to the forgotten light of life. This is an amazing write and you are truly talented...


  • secberm
    April 1, 2008

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    I know you were thinking of me the whole time you wrote this. You flatterer! This is an incredible write. Good luck and write on. One.

    Dez


  • Swan song gold member
    March 31, 2008

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    Is there a reason why I am sitting here with mouth gaping! Oh yes there is! you my dear lady are brilliant


  • WisdomWarrior
    March 31, 2008

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    Oh my. ON behalf of Black men everywhere, we appreciate such a wonderful testament! Ashea!

    One Love,

    John

    PS- I am speechless. Thank you.


  • Peteskid gold member
    March 30, 2008
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    oh that last line sets me dreaming...a panorama of ages here, and the rich and fulfilling words offer depth and find resonance in the world all around and over years of history; a culmination in the open hand and love of Femme Noir. Thank you for this fine entry into the contest and the best of luck to you in the judging...PK **


  • jo-el
    March 29, 2008

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    love the way you take us to the beginnin. first line is great. typo: though should be through. how you describe the beauty of that early darkness leaves me in awe. 2nd stanza is so real and ends with an encouraging truth. most excellent ma


  • princehusayn
    March 29, 2008

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    Powerful expression

    In the realm of the tripple darkness it is only expression that makes impression and causes movement on the face of the deep. This expression did and does just that. It is impacting to the deep thinker because of it's imagery and calls the shallow thinker to delve deeper into their souls for light and reason to come up off that surface and see clearly what and why no weapon forged against make good. Yo I was tripping I felt this and I want to thank you for sharing this is close to gospel this is close to living prophesy. Peace.

  • JustBreathe
    March 29, 2008

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    "Insurgence of Light energy
    dug though deepest core of earth
    scooping up handfuls of carbon dirt
    likened unto black coal and indigo sky
    with ebony sprinkled stars mixed
    molding, shaping breath-baked sculpt
    seared through life's vortex
    first black seed
    womb of humanity"

    What a glorious way to envision the beginning of humankind ... and Africa was its mother. So much was given to...and has been taken from Afria over the centuries. And yet, those who still claim her greatness, transcending all the odds, still "stand straight , poised, regal, and proud". It is an amazing thing! And I for one am thankful for my ancestors' contributions to the world's civilization, and understand how important it is for me to continue to sow the seeds of knowledge and pride to the younger generations. Wonderful write poet! Fed my soul this morning♥ Best wishes in the contest!


  • Rele anmwe
    March 29, 2008

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    This is a very powerful write, it portraits a man like me so well, just kidding. Yes, we soothe throughout the hurts, finally, we are put back


  • Swangrnv gold member
    March 29, 2008
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    SUPERB!

    I LOVE THIS FROM START-FINISH! Wow! You got mad talent!


  • blueyez
    March 29, 2008

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    now you know I saw the title to this one sis and had to feast upon it! Wonderful description in this write. Gotta love it!
    Peace and Love always


  • Cannonsfire
    March 29, 2008

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    So beautifully expressed as always. It is making me think today as I watch the upcoming elections in Zimbabwe that perhaps we sometimes listen to the hardened souls too often in this world instead of the heart of the people. Love, C

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