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Deadly Strings

Missing image

Once proud and happy ; alive and free

Until society’s puppeteers engulfed my soul

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Guided by merciless hands

They bestowed me on deadly strings

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Now, I’m forgotten, my flesh rotting to bones

To remain in my hammock grave forevermore

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  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    April 3, 2008

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    Very fitting take on the prompt that defines today's society so well. Great write. Congratulations on HM.


  • delightfulmess silver member
    April 3, 2008

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    oh very profound ending to this piece.
    Well done Thank you for entering my contest.


    Delila


  • albymyheart gold member
    March 29, 2008

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    A very good descriptive write pertaining to the pic, and what an unusual pic it is.

    "Society's puppeteers" is a great analogy as the skeleton does look like a puppet hanging from its strings...alby


  • Gwenevere
    March 29, 2008

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    Ouch!!!! you pack a mean punch.Your short verse says so much.Well done with this.a great take on the picture, Ros


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    March 29, 2008

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    That picture is horrific and your words do it perfect justice!

    Excellent write

    Best of luck
    ♥
    Stay safe
    I love you, always
    ~Manda


  • Neha Kaushik
    March 29, 2008

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    An excellent take on the prompt.. loved the last two lines.. good luck in the contest.. Thanx for sharing..

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