What I wouldn't give to feel your hand on my face.
Finger tips dancing from ear to chin and back again.
The warmth- the contrast between smooth and rough.
What I wouldn't give to see your eyes fill with joy,
As I'm running up the street to leap into your arms.
Legs wrapped around your waist, fingers tangled in your hair.
What I wouldn't give to feel your breath on my lips,
Hot with anticipation- the moment before our first kiss,
The velocity of our ignited blood rushing through our veins.
What I wouldn't give to wrap myself up in your arms,
Burrow deep within your heart, sheltered from the winds of woe.
Holding your heart in my hands like a child holds a dream.
What I wouldn't give to feel your hands entwine my body,
While mine entwine yours, memorizing the hills and valleys of each other’s souls.
Lost beneath the sheets- delving into our unprecedented bliss.
What I wouldn't give to stare into your eager eyes,
At the exact moment you enter me, our bodies finally one.
A wave of euphoria rushes through us-
What I wouldn't give.
Author notes
Entered as a pre-write.
Contest: Describe want.
Tease it forward
toward the reader
make them
touch the very flesh of it
but do not use the word
not even once
in the body of your
Want.
A contest entry
- Exercise your Want by ErrantHeart.
900 points, ended April 15, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I'd Give Up Forever To Touch You by PastelMoons.
1000 points, ended January 20, 28 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Superbly romantic!!!
Thank you for entering
~Pastel
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My man is away at school and i wont see him till december and i havent seen him since last december. Well done!
Mylee -
OK.....I'll take that cigarette now.....
Congratulations!
This poem should come with a door..that you can close....in case ya want to read it again.
Very wild, wild child.
PHEWWWWW,
LOWELL,
cant give ya lil guys...i gave the doe back....lol -
A wonderful entry.
And what tipped the scale slightly against I think, and probably just for me, was that last line just before your final, impactful, "what I wouldn't give"..."A wave of euphoria rushes through us-" Somehow I just stumble a wee bit over this.
But wonderful expressed 'want', to be sure.
Thank you.
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How beautiful this, I'm trying not to cry, because I bleed and dream for this everyday! the love and everything, oh me this is perfect, this is everything, how amazing you truly, more than words could ever said, as always, I hope you win!!!
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I like the repetition of "what I wouldn't give".
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Very Nice!!
I really like this one and hope you can feel this one day!!
Harmony -
I like the way this builds. Well done erotica
Question is what would he give, to be with a woman of your spirit and passion?
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Yeah....thats a damn good poem.
The line "Holding your heart in my hands like a child holds a dream" is my favorite, what a line. I do not favor love poetry, although I am finding I actually do when its good. This is fantastic and beautiful...I felt the emotion and need and want. Excellent.
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did i say i liked it ?
fuckin love it -
i called you dude
lol sorry just ran 2 miles lol im like out of it worked like 12 hours then ran 2 miles now its time to lift and the poem great read it twice -
fucking nice comeing over soon?
holy shit dude very nice very hot i'm all sweaty after reading that love it...
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This is a beautiful poem and beautifully written. Love the imagery and strong emotion involved in it. Great write!
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This is beautifully written. The emotion in this can definitely be felt while reading it. I love the description, the intensity of the emotions evoked. This is a powerful piece on anticipation and what we wouldn't do or "give" to have the things we want so badly. Very good, Bravo!
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