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Rain on Love.

Rain is attacking me.
Fighting me, Never ceasing.
The attack just repeating.
Like little soldiers from a colonial time.
Marching one by one.
Marching with no rhyme.

I have a picture clenched in my hand.
The picture of them holding hands.
with my heart,
beating fiercer than drum.
My whole body begins to numb.

This anger I fill with boils my blood.
I begin to think I'm one big stud.
now adrenaline flows,
As my breathing grows.

I reach for my gun,
buried in my pocket.
I pull it out and open its socket.
I am still walking ever so calm.
As I load three bullets
into their home.

I see the man from the picture.
I think "What a pitiful creature."
I raise the gun and squeeze the trigger.
I can no longer see his figure.

He falls back into the wall,
and with a great thud,
he falls.
a yell comes from down the hall.
My one true love concernedly calls.

My feelings turn from content to rage.
I feel as if I broken from a cage.
I tear down the halls screaming her name.
The walls shake,
For I am no longer tame.

I break in her door.
I call her a whore.
She cries it was only for a score.

Only for a score?!
A knotch in the belt?!
Is that all you felt?

I turn to her,
I begin to murmur.
I hate you with all my heart,
I always want to be apart.
You little bitch,
you took my life,
You were my only wife.

Were your only wife?! (her)
I still am hunny! (her)

No! No your not.
you cannot.

I raise the gun once again,
Her voice trembles right then.

I love you.

The gun fires.

The bullet pierces my one love.
and shes dies more peaceful than a dove.

With quiet filling the home,
my mind begins to roam.

What have I done?
This I cannot outrun.
I have no where to go.
No where to toe.

I wish it where all undone.

I look at the gun,
and remember the one.
I think this battle can't be won.

I think to put the gun back in my pocket,
But instead I begin to cock it.

Now...
The metal feels cold against my chin,
as the bullets starts to sink in.



 






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  • MYsecondchance
    June 13, 2008
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    this is good thanx for entering


  • N e a r
    April 22, 2008
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    The beginning with the rain reference is a great opener. It really brought the reader into focus with the topic. It really was intense down to the very last thing. It especially got to that climax once the trigger was pulled... terrifying. Thanks for your entry.


  • Pretty Britty
    March 31, 2008
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    Wow this is a really good write! I love the imagery!

  • ScreamingConfession
    March 28, 2008

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    Oh wow! That is so intence!! Great work! You had me hanging onto every word in anticpation. This is fantastic!

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