Annual dormancy
yellows
and sharply wicks
the seedling’s stinging
aerosol afterbirth.
Peeling out,
milk erupts
In echoed tribute
to winter’s cold -
a 21 gun salute
to spring’s post thaw maw
then, once again,
yields, recedes...
to the graceful guest of summer.
Author notes
word bank:
*yellow
*sting
*recede
*afterbirth
*wick
*peeling
*milk
*graceful
A contest entry
- Words for the Few by SurelyWritten.
390 points, ended May 3, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Excellent!
I live this.
OH indeed I live this! So well done, I would never have known a word bank was in use - as it should be in this case.
Brilliant work as I have come to expect. Best of luck in the contest! ~Pamela
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Wow, this is a brilliantly created poem... I like the way it is formatted and the iomagery that you use, concise and sharp - wonderful writing - I wish you the best of luck in the contest
Keep writing
Polly
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Thank you Polly, for your comment
Paul
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Such an excellent take on the word bank; creative, and with such wonderful flow. Good luck in the contest~ not that luck is needed with this.
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amazing journey you took us here revealing not only the talent which you have but at the same time showing us the depth and mystery of this world...well done..thanks for sharing it....
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*jaw-drop*
Very disturbing, but amazing images! "aerosol aftebirth" Holy crap! The picture you put in my mind just leaves me flabbergasted. And the "milk errupts" Same thing- Wow...
I'm stuttering and speechless, very intriguing write.
Thanks for entering,
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Thank you Shirly. I'm glad you had that reaction. I do enjoy a good word bank now and then. They really leave my muse mind running hot.
Paul
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