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Musical Memories

Within the labyrinth of mind
Music dwells like ocean mist
For once the music is aligned

‘Tis how your soul is so defined
A passion one cannot resist
Within the labyrinth of mind

Orchestral tones are so refined
As your spirit has been kissed
For once the music is aligned

As cares and woes do fall behind
And hungry spirits must subsist
Within the labyrinth of mind

A lasting memory enshrined
As symbols crash with iron fist
Within the labyrinth of mind
For once the music is aligned

 

 

 

Author notes

Villanelle:
A Villanelle is a nineteen-line poem consisting of a very specific rhyming scheme:
aba aba aba aba aba abaa.
The first and the third lines in the first stanza are repeated in alternating order throughout the poem, and appear together in the last couplet (last two lines).
Form Resource: shadowpoetry.com

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  • second-born
    March 31, 2008

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    wow...this is surely one the 'memories' that I would like to keep...with 'music,' all my pain just fades away, and like music, your 'poetry' also helps me to soothe my soul....God bless!!!


  • Swan song gold member
    March 29, 2008

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    Another lovely one with a smoother tone than the last one I read. Not to demean your last poem just that the
    cadence is different Excellent!


  • PerVirtuous
    March 29, 2008

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    This is a very beautiful write. I know you are writing with eight-syllables, and so are very constrained, and you have worked within those constraints masterfully. I feel the flow of this seems to go like waves of the ocean. Was that intentional? It certainly works, regardless. Bravo!


  • creationsfromheart
    March 29, 2008

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    this is a wonderful Villanelle, normally I do not like them at all but you managed to pull it off wonderfully with out it being forced, it reads well and flows nicely wonderful write!


  • moonbumps silver member
    March 29, 2008
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    A subject most treasured and loved-Music, and formed perfectly by you dear Amera-
    xxx Hilly xxx


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    March 29, 2008

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    I shall have to look afresh at this form, some time when I am not dry. You seem to be able to summon it up at will.


  • HaleyMary
    March 29, 2008

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    Beautiful write, Amera. I think music can be very uplifting to the soul. I also liked the last line the best. It makes me think of when an artist is able to write a lyric just the way they like and feel happy when the piece of music is accomplished. Wonderful poetic form, as always. Thanks for sharing and keep that pen flowing.


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    March 28, 2008
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    Once again the form I adore...the story line here also "musical"...I love you.

    Passions


  • StarEyes
    March 28, 2008

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    What a great job you did on this one!! I am a firm believer in music, and this is just one of the wonderful reasons why....

    Beautiful!!!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • And Hyetal
    March 28, 2008

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    I love all the descriptions of the music! I really like this form, too, and all the rhyming. I love the last line.



    ~Cassie


  • Faeryn
    March 28, 2008

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    Awesome poem, Amera. I love the last two stanzas; the villanelle is such a cool form and I really like the repitition. Best of luck in the contest.
    I love you,
    Tay


  • JohnnyD gold member
    March 28, 2008

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    I tasted this poem and it tasted nothing like vanilla? More like pistachio or butternut?

    No, this was very cute, and rhythmic..... and the labyrinth of my mind is easy to find after the shock theraphy treatment.



    dad


  • individuality gold member
    March 28, 2008

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    a good piece with the musical imagery maybe think on using punctuation? that is up to you though. a good beat here which flows along with gentle ease. nicely done. thanks for entering.


    • Amera gold member
      March 28, 2008
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      I thought the line breaks were self explanatory. I'll remove it Thanks for reading and the applause.

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