And like a leaky facet
emotions
spill over the pale pages,
heartache,
echoing through the night.
Oh the sound.
Oh the sound of it,
leaking through eyes,
tighten, subdue, cries.
Never awake; smile forsake
heartache, oh the sound of it.
They vibrate and multiply;
uncontrolled
heartache,
Oh the sound,
swarming through the never ending nightmares
so constantly lurking.
Oh the sound of it,
cutting my skin,
underlie thin,
never again; smile forsake
heartache, oh the sound of it.
Dripping over in blood,
freezing crimson veins like icicle daggers
smeared
with a shattered life
that drifted so far away.
Oh the sound.
Cries with such intense agony,
heartache
pausing my pulse,
pausing it for one mere moment.
Oh the sound.
Oh the sound of it,
cloud seal mind,
feel confined.
A moment
forever lost to the dessert;
heartbeats,
heartaches,
in the black place lying in time.
Living mistake; smile forsake
heartache,
oh, and the sound of it.
Finally silent.
Author notes
Inspired in part by another poem titled 'Calebs Colors' written by a fellow class mate.
A contest entry
- Calling ALL Poets! ~ A Poetry Extraveganza by Shassidy.
475 points, ended July 18, 2008, 84 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is a great piece! I really like the emotion in this as well as the flow and the repetition. It reminds me of another poem I once read in the book titled "250 Poems: A Portable Anthology" in which a woman gets sick of her heart beating the way it does and finally stops it. I like the repetition in this because it emphasizes the lines and gives the poem a sort of rhythm and flow. I also like the imagery in this piece as well, it has wonderful imagery. My favorite parts in this poem are stanzas two, five, and nine because those have the best imagery and really caught my attention. The title of this is a bit long and odd, but it works with the poem well. Maybe try shortening the title using a few powerful words to sum it all up, but that's my only suggestion. Anyway, great job and good luck in the contest!
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I am glad you liked it so much. I like the title even though it is long because when I was writting this I looked up broken in my dictinary and that is what fallowed. I am a fan of unique titles and I have always wanted to use a dictinary defination as a title.
thanks again for the comment and I am glad you enjoyed this piece.
cassie
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It was a sad sad poem here. but it was still good. keep on writing!
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amasying!!
this is one of my favorites. i love it. i love the lines hey vibrate and multiply;
uncontrolled
heartache,
Oh the sound,
swarming through the never ending nightmares
so constantly lurking.
it totally applys to me...
jeffie loves it too. he says to tell you he will be visiting soon. he wants to ride the rolercoasters with george again. apparetly george threw up last time. jeff laughed at him. lol poor george. just keep jeff away from the cotton candy. he got sick last time. poor thing. oh well give john, paul, george and ringo our love.
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