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dream of self

 
 
 
 
 
Come the dawn,
spider webs and dreams
are taken down
and, sometimes, the moon as well-
all buried in closeted
spaces, those pale
grave channels carved
between eye and nerve.
 
There, for a hover,
in the blink between sleep
and a day, anything
can gather sense
and order- where, recalling
phantom memories,
I understand everything,
unlike when awake- 

that knowledge cannot bide
its time,
just a boy on the outside,
falling for an ocean,
 
and waiting to drown ...

for a night in her

 

again:
 
small spoons for large cakes
with too many candles unlit;
my devil in the deep
blue jeans and not enough
water for a nameless horse,
nor a shallow trough where image
and reflection can be splashed
away; she's coming back while
leaving, stepping against
the angle of gravity. It all
makes sense in the mourning,
in the unfinished land
of wide awake and dreaming.

 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

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Inspired by Rowan's: "Yes, I Dream in Color"

http://allpoetry.com/poem/4060069

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  • Fug-azi
    March 31

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    I think there is a bit more to this than the essence of dreaming ... but there again I could just be reading more into it than there is

    Excellent quality, but it is only what is expected from an excellent poet such as you.


  • zochit2me gold member
    March 29

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    This is stunning and so well written from Kathleen's poem. A sad feel to it...a longing to understand the world at awake time as we do at dream time...if that makes any sense. You truly are a wonderful writer.

    Becky


  • Faithbound gold member
    March 28
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    You truly that good. Every one of you are and I am in for a hell of judging...


  • Rowan gold member
    March 28

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    I'd like to cuss at you for being so damn good. lol.
    Yet, I'm humbled that I inspired you to this...
    You're amazing hon. Truly.
    I more than loved this, I actually understood this more
    than I usually do. A dream, but not a dream, then to
    dream, again. Have I told you lately you're a bitch
    but I love you.
    Kathleen


  • Jaden silver member
    March 28

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    This one makes a lot of sense, depending, I suppose, on one's sensibility. Time is relevant in the inescapable clutch of relativity . . . you do a great job showing this in the poem. Really smart of you . . . and artistic.

  • Ooo, I love that ... you've been doing some phenomenal stuff lately


  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    March 28

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    I really like this. I like that you used 'I,' and I enjoyed the gentle introspection of it. There is a deep sad somewhere at the heart of it, but the hope on the surface makes it bearable.



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