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Anticipation

Moonlight froze
inside the
      s
        p
      i
    r
      a
    l
of ethereal night;

anticipating
the heated
seduction of the
glimmering
horizon

fixed

upon your brow.

Author notes

6. Sends shivers down my spine

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  • LadyDementia gold member
    April 29, 2008

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    Wow very seductive! A beautifully written piece, love the way you spiralled the word 'spiral'. You are a natural at sensual pieces


  • Tattboyspet
    March 31, 2008

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    yummy!
    beautifully done here - you have taken nature and made her sensual
    although, sometimes the anticipation can be more rewarding than the actual deed right?


  • HaleyMary
    March 29, 2008

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    Beautiful write and powerful imagery and passion expressed. I like the way you wrote the word spiral in this poem. It seemed to portray imagery of a reflection of a moon against the water. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.


  • Unsigned gold member
    March 28, 2008
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    oh yes it did send shivers spiraling down my spine.....bbbbbrrrrrr

    Good luck

    Simon


  • Nicolette gold member
    March 28, 2008

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    Love where you took this - it's fresh, imaginative and so very visual and sensual. Lovely!!

    ~ Nicolette

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