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In the middle

Trapped between heaven's heartache,
and hell's unquenchable thirst
I wait
I wonder
I desire
  I live...

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  • Blooming Poet
    April 1, 2008

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    This is good, but I feel like there could of been so much more, i understand it is a short poem, but you dd not use the lines as well as I think you could of. Good luck

  • Aisades
    March 28, 2008
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    mmm this has a sexy, hungering, erotic and yet torturous appeal.


  • Deceits Tears silver member
    March 28, 2008

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    I wait
    I wonder
    I desire
    I live..
    Words that most of us live by.
    I agree with the previous comment, simple but oh so strong Be well my friend


  • Neha Kaushik
    March 28, 2008

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    Wonderful!! its so beautiful and deep.. such simple words evincing strong notions.. Thanx for sharing.. loved reading it..