Tell me, in this bleary night
What do I surrender to?
There's just too much I have to fight,
Before the night is through.
Too many swords hang too close.
I can't move around at all.
But yes, I'm still the one who chose
To brave and not to fall.
So, sometimes my vision blurrs
And I lose track of my foes.
A blink of eye, I kick the spurs
And I'm back on my toes.
I'm tired, not of what I got,
But, I just can't handle more.
The floor below is turning hot,
Two swords just turned to four.
There are some scars bound to bleed,
Some burns refreshed and new.
Then, how can I expect to leave
The blissful moments few?
Moments when I can forget
The pain , the hurt, the hate,
The cards in hand that I've been dealt,
The ugly face of fate.
Now, if the making of my life
Ruins me beyond the know,
Atleast I'll be dead off the knife
That has my name aglow!
Author notes
Option 5. Write about HEALTH; LIVING,DIEING, ETC...
I wrote this poem when I was contemplating on how many people tell me to quit smoking coz it will damage my health and reduce my life. I'm a passionate smoker and it really helps me deal with the tough moments in my daily life. It has also helped me stay away from depression and suicidal tendencies due to some disturbing times in my life.
Hence it's a question of what I surrender to?
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Comments
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Wow I related so much and I'm not even a smoker. I'd call that perfectly vague and MUST mean a good use of metaphor. Really enjoyed this, really fit perfectly with a recent night of mine. Glad to see you're writing more, and so well!
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ohh thanks a lot.... i was hoping u'd be commenting...it's been long since i wrote... still have some unfinished stuff that i need to get done....now that i've got a job there's absolutely no time to write anymore
Luv
VidZ
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