First the Moon will collide with the Earth
The friction of greater magnitude then any napalm
A sonic boom bringing our existance to its knees
Pressured into the crust that once cradled life
Awaiting the wall of ash to decend its judgement
Politely taking the grim measures from us
Leaving a mortal coil, finally one with nature
Second would be the Sun; father of Sol
Drained from grandchildren, space consumes its heart
The lights dim to nothing as the audiance left
One too many times civilization played with fire
Tears shed as oceans through pain and suffering
Burning passion has no solitude for existance
A reality where the vectors are dampened
The fridged chill of Kalvin becomes absolute
Third the plentiful stars of a midnight sky
Falling from the grace of the apperant heavens
Not as the molted angel wings flutter from lost hope
But as golden bullets targeted to each grain of sand
In wich a glass layer will encase the final moment
The museum of wonders and the finest acheivement
Yet the marvel will shatter as with dying dreams
Finally is the Universe imploding upon a single point
Black holes and quasars pulverized to oblivion
Photons of light unable to escape catastrophe
The grim hand of gravity granted powers of fusion
Gods and angels died under such a travesty of awe
Spirits and apperations trapped to bound laws
All that can exist is the darkness, the darkness
If man had the full potential of the mind
This would be the plain the moment it was acheived
Travelling through time would become possible
For the beginning and the end is oscillating
And the pinicle of ages is mans last step
The step that destroys even what it does not know
If man had the full potential of the mind
Bang
A contest entry
- A Darker Poetry Contest II by -BlackKnight-.
300 points, ended April 8, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
critsize, i want to know what i did wrong rather then right
Comments
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This sounds an awful like a variation of the so-called Big Crunch theory that some mis-guided scientists think will bring an end to our Universe while simultaneously signalling the beginning of a new one.
At least, the fourth stanza does, anyway. Not sure about the other three.
Except for the whole bit with the Moon colliding with the Earth. If such a thing were to occur, you'd have a lot more to worry about than mere sonic booms and dust clouds. More like cataclysmic walls of fire extending out in every direction for hundreds of miles, destroying everything in their path, along with huge chunks of the Earth's crust and mantel being jetted into space. Some of this material might then rain down on the rest of the planet, causing destruction far surpassing anything humanity has ever experienced. And while the Earth may survive the collision and not be destroyed, it would be greatly misshapen and damaged. -
Wow. Umm it doesn't really seem like there's anything wrong with it to me but I'd have to read it over a couple more times to really be able to analyze and at the moment I do not have the time, but I will return and read it over again. Thank you for commenting my poem and I'm very sorry it took me so long to return the favor. Thanks again.
-The Dark Poet-
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