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''black castle of felmourn''

''black castle of felmourn''

in the frozen kingdom of felmourn
where the wind wails and the dead trees mourn.
the sun don't shine, the birds don't croon;
nothing more but snow-covered dune..

but amidst the cold and barren land
a black citadel there it stand
covered in an ebony, sooty shroud
stands a dark castle lofty and proud..

echoing through the walls of cobblestone
a faint voice utters laments, and moans.
vallerie, a maiden so fair and kind
her soul is shackled and tortured is her mind..

magically sealed behind walls of stone
lugubrious, tormented and alone
there she'll dwell forever more,
damned to be forgotten lore..

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  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    November 5

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    Awesome...

    Dark narrative with wonderful imagery & depth, smooth rhythm & flawless rhyme that captivates throughout...
    Keep up the good work...
    Well done!!!