blooming daffodils amid the emerald sea make us giddy
as rabbits sail through the waves
the sun toasting our skin with the most bewitching kiss
the ancient oak, silent sentinel, guardian of our paradise
He waits ready to relieve us from the warm summers sun
the wind rubs us in the most enchanting manner
the willow is singing somewhere far off
the wind gives one last kiss
then the flowers whither
the great oak eternal and omnipotent
Author notes
my father never forced me to do anything he just guided me, let me make my own mistakes but helped me put myself back together
A contest entry
- I Dream In Color by CarolDesjarlais.
875 points, ended March 28, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - just about anything :) by nobodys-girl.
300 points, ended April 10, 2008, 56 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - No Forced Rhyme Just Solid Writes by James Ether.
402 points, ended April 13, 2008, 12 entries
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what do you think?
Comments
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i think that's so cool that you had that kind of relationship. thankyou so much for entering my contest and good luck!
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I'm glad this is the poem that beat me out for the gold. this really is great. And I feel it. I think you should check out my contest. I could use some genuine pieces.
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Oh the metaphors and iamges in this write are incredibly beautiful.... I lvoe how the daffodils and rabbits show up in waves in my mind... Stunning write.
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