Crystal emotions,
peripherally viewed.
Casting away anguish,
upon lace wings.
Author notes
10 words
Prompt-Pic provided
A contest entry
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Comments
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This is actually quite a good piece you have here. I would suggest changing "casting" to "casts" and I would remove the period after viewed and make it a comman instead. A lovely piece here.
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Awesome job with those 10 words!! It was deep and very thought provoking. Thanks and the best of luck in the contest
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this is so goood!! its worded so well.. and everything just fits. aaamazing!!
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Ah yes, it's so important to cast away the anguish when the time for it is gone. Unfortunately, hindsight, as you point out, is often the only way we have clear enough vision to do so.
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Truly descriptive and vivid in imagery.. x Thanks ever so much for sharing and many blessings to you too. Love and light, Lavender Butterfly.
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very wonderful words penned good luck
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Excellent take of the prompt Good luck with it.
Cara
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