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sanctuary

 

 

 

the ocean was wrinkled

when the gull flourished

and late afternoon

was the salty tongue

of the wind

 

 

 

she rose with the gale

and the night bowed

as she spread her sail

 

 

 

a ghostly sun died

in a pale moon's calling

and she was

the sea-torn summoner

 

 

 

on a violet midnight

above arrogant

hollow songs

of the sea

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • jcat gold member
    May 6, 2008

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    So much beauty is captured here....Stunning imagery!! Your word choice was beautiful and flawless. Congrats on the shiney here as well as being member of the month


  • MysticalRayne
    May 6, 2008

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    Your imagery is excellent ~ I love this piece makes you ffel like you are actually at the sea side ~ congrats on being the member of the month


  • Sacred Ground
    May 6, 2008

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    Just beautiful!! I know that this has nothing to do with your poem,, other than the sea, but Cooleridge is one of my favorites; The Rime Of The Ancient Mariner.
    Congrats on your trophy win, a very deserving win, indeed.
    ~S~G~

  • Kari gold member
    May 6, 2008

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    Wow, this piece is just stunning to say the least!


  • Desire gold member
    April 4, 2008

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    Oh My!!

    Another Beauty to compliment the picture~
    Images to stun the Mind-Satiate the Soul
    Love it and the words: hollow songs~
    salty tongue!!
    Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
    -Throws confetti-
    Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo


    Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • delightfulmess silver member
    April 1, 2008

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    Whew~~ this is absolutley stunning.
    Very original take here thank you so much for the entry in my contest.


    Delila


  • myrataal silver member
    April 1, 2008

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    Often, in a short moment ...

    the poetic eye brings to life a unique apparition, which transcends the hollowness of arrogance ... and a lovely poem, inspired by nature -- like yours -- is born!

    Well done, M.

    Love
    Myra


  • Star Shine
    March 28, 2008

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    I think this is astounding, "the salty tongue of the sea" instantly created a three dimensional picture in my mind, this piece is pure art. And serenity.

  • Rowan gold member
    March 27, 2008

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    Delightfulmess asked for a stunning picture...
    and here it is.
    Perfect.


  • Night Hope gold member
    March 27, 2008

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    "on a violet midnight
    above arrogant
    hollow songs
    of the sea"

    Lane already used my favorite stanza. But this one is immaculate, as well. Beautifully penned, my Friend. I love poems about the sea...& this one casts a ghostly shadow across the shoreline as it trembles. Gorgeous, Scribe. Good luck in the contest, Sweetie. Wanderer


  • Dalaney gold member
    March 27, 2008

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    my favorite stanza:

    "a ghostly sun died
    in a pale moon's calling
    and she was
    the sea-torn summoner..."

    Superb.

    Love, Lane

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