All day at work I wait with anticipation
trying hard to control instant ejaculation
I can see you in front of me waiting
as I walk into the room, see you naked against our wall
as I have many times before eager to please and tease
wearing only stockings and heels
ivory skin against dark hair
head tilted in just the right way
showing that little girl at play
my desire and fire well lit
but tonight shall be for my consumption
and solely your pleasure
as I shall have my just desert
lips so ready for my kiss
aroma crosses the room and weakens me
sweetness emanates drawing me near
needing to drink of you
moving closer to where you stand
my passion is to consume you
your nipples now hard against my chest
showing your excitement for me
one kiss to start the flow
my fingers now find their way
to wetness between your legs
as I begin and watch you squirm
I revel in each sensual move you make
deeper and deeper
my tongue enters
your body starts to convulse
as you peak uncontrollably
but just then as my tongue ensues
so does my hand and simultaneously
as you implore
you beg me no more
my tongue and fingers bring tides of pleasures
I slowly move you to our bed
continuing deeper and deeper
till I taste of all your nectars spilling
my excitement brought about by your moans
stopping only when you’ve lost complete and total control
*Rdrl*
Author notes
his view......my pleasure
Deepredvelvet......1 entry
A contest entry
- Round 3... Invite ONLY, Poetry Challenge by elemental angel.
650 points, ended April 14, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - !!!!*Making Love Intensely*!!!! by ForeverLastingComa.
490 points, ended February 22, 55 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This was very hot and steamy! Ioved the way you wrote from another point of view. That was pretty cool. My favorite lines were the begging because it really caught my attention,
"All day at work I wait with anticipation
trying hard to control instant ejaculation
I can see you in front of me waiting
as I walk into the room, see you naked against our wall
as I have many times before eager to please and tease"
thank you for entering and good luck -
I think I'll have to stop reading poetry now and go see what my husband is doing at this moment. Your descriptions are memorable, particularly standing naked against the wall in just stockings and heels. Good luck in this contest. Peace, Liz
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This is a great poem... I liked the way you wrote it from someone elses perspective, you did a great job
I really enjoyed reading this poem - good luck in the contest!
Keep writing
Polly
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Wonderfully erotic, A good HOT take on the prompt, I like how you reversed the roles, very original.
Bravo
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Oh...it's such a lustfully seductive poem!...
It has tuned me on...
and my hands have no other option but to touch myself...
and imagine what might happen to me in such a situation...
with such a lusty, voluptuous girlfriend, desiring me...
with a willing body....
all for me...
giving me all earthly pleasures...
her body all set for me...
and mine for her...
How wonderful it would be to be in such a situation!...
she and me employing all our sensual skills to please each other...
giving and taking...
kissing and being kissed...
licking and being licked...
having and being had...
touching...
rubbibg...
massaging...
eating...
trying to quench our unquenchabe thirst and hunger...
devoring each other's bodies...
Oh my...I got carried away...
You turned me into a wild tigress, honey!...didn't you...
Please don't write such an erotic poem again....
Kisses...and thank you for giving me the wild pleasure!
Galaxy2
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