you once said you loved me
what crap that was
i asked why you were doing this
you answered "just cause..."
you break my heart
with everything you say
you expect everything
to always go your way
i deserve better
you're nothing to me
but i can't get away
from your love i want free
you get in the way
of my goals and my dreams
you're driving me crazy
i just want to scream
i always give in
and this time i think i'm done
find someone else
to be tortured by your so called "fun"
A contest entry
- TEENAGE GIRLS!!! PAY ATTENTION!!!! by Procrastination.
450 points, ended April 3, 2008, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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Using a set of couplets allowed the intesity of this poem. Good Sometiems a simple form is better when you are venting in a poem! well done
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I love it. I love the words you used, I love it's structure, I love it's rhyme technique! Incredible!
Goodluck in the contest.
xxx
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Wow I know exactly how you feel... I know all to well how it feels to be used by someone... I hope you never have to go through that ever again... Yet all in all you captured how I feel in this one... I love it you did a very good job. ^-^
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