wanting you like a driven need
sears through my skin
heating me up till i burn
your touch like an icy flame
licking at my body
consuming me till i drown
your tongue like an ember
gliding over me to swallow me whole
your hands a devils mire
a glowing sweltering heat
eating me alive with madness
till you consume me
every fiber of me is burned
with the imprint of you
your tongue between my thighs
forcing your fire to blaze through me
up my belly to wrap around my breasts
taking over me till my blood boils
making me burn hot
with the same flame that you do
until we burn so hot
our bodies explode together
in a fire that could never be put out
Author notes
contest
A contest entry
- Passion- Adults Only by Free By His Hand.
600 points, ended April 1, 2008, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
-
Beautifully passionate and good use of heat and fire as a metaphorical motif.
Good write.
-
You spread wild fire in me, honey!
You're so uncontrolably hot and fiery!
and that is what matters in love and lust...
Someone making love in such a firy way to me has been one of my wildest fantasies....
and you've got that capacity to make love in the way that makes the two bodies burn while in action...
very few people have that skill...
...undoubtedly...you're my type...
so we've got at least one kind of relationship...
I loved to read your erotica...I especially loved it for its fiery tiuch....
right frim the start till the end...
The poem beautifully ends in a climax...
'until we burn so hot
our bodies explode together
in a fire that could never be put out'....
You're kissable...honey...all over!
Galaxy2
-
It's really wonderful to read your poetry because you pour so much passion and sincerity into everything you write. This was incredibly moving... the realistic messages written into it were admirable and made this a piece I could easily relate to and enjoy. Keep up the awesome work, love. Great job and good luck.
Adding your comment:
