Blooded bare feet belies
sponged carpet of mossed rock
Yet I've been running for hours.
Vines resemble spears thrown
leather straps cut the khaki.
Perusing vacating Peruvian vacation.
Although filming in Ghana
kept the blade close to grasp,
these jungles push the rapidness of pulse.
Breath indeed took away
by the vapors of God Himself.
Plunging water coursing the sound barrier.
Yet with beauty comes the contrast.
I've invaded sacred graveyards
for Au, atomic number 79, pays well.
Maybe a cavern to stash my presence,
cool my dogs in liquid spring splashing,
a prayer for my family, if wet matches falter.
Author notes
Prompt:
http://peterconcept.deviantart.com/art/Fantasy-Island-73647548
A contest entry
- Fantasy Island - Picture contest by aboomer.
525 points, ended April 6, 2008, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Such wonderful descriptions, so unique
you have told an awesome story with super imagery. All the best in the contest 
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wow.. umm.. is there really anything else to say..
I really enjoyed this piece..
The image you created was very interesting..
Great write..
Peace to you, Jetleena
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My first read-through, I felt this a little random and line 6 caused a 'stumble'. But I've read it about 4 times now and like how your randomness ties together (although line 6 still throws me off for some reason...not sure why as its great wording!).
Very well worded, great images and reads well.
A very nice entry. Thank you.
best wishes in the contest.
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thank you...when i saw the picture, i thought of the waterfalls in peru, and tried to write a story based on someone who went there to film, stole gold from ancient burial grounds, then became chased by the locals....i just placed a story in the picture...so line six was meant to reflect the regret in visiting in the first place...hope this clears this up a bit, i know my randomness is usually askew..thanks again
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I liked your randomness and followed that story fine, including line 6 and I don't know why that line threw the flow off for me - as I like that line! - I think it's just me...lol....
well done! great story, too!
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I sooooo enjoy your writes!
Your style is one of the most unique I've read, you always manage to put your wit in there...I'd like to "visit" your mind some day! LOL "Plunging water coursing the sound barrier." I LOVE that line!
Best wishes in the contest!
Write on and on and on...
*PEACE*
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