We are the walking dead
slaving in and out of each day
we are the forgotten
Left to fend for ourselves
We are your neighbors
lying in wait
we are your lovers
holding you in our throng
We are your thoughts
when you can't sleep
we are your dreams
both funny and sad
We are the controllers
ruling your mind
we are the owners
of everything inside
We are what you want to be
what you strive for
we are everything and one
we are... man
Author notes
ok not my best, and definitly not the poem I thought I was gonna write for this, but i liked the title and the rest just sorta happened... so we'll see I guess.
A contest entry
- Thoughts to (and from) the Public. by SurelyWritten.
1000 points, ended March 28, 2008, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I like the consistency of this, the continual use of "we are" to start your stanzas, it's a poetic device that I love to see, even love to write sometimes.. Repetition, sort of..
I love the flow, it is very smooth for such a fast write, and even though you didn't slave over a meter, you penned something that is not choppy or hard to read..
Like I told Lane, I love simplicity in poems, I know you knew that and I'm glad you remembered it for my contest.
It may not be your best, but I'm of the opinion that no poet can ever write his or her best. At least not before death...
I love you, thanks for entering my contest because you know how much it means to me. *mwuah*
Shirley
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