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Have you ever kissed a snowflake
or had breakfast with the sun,
walked upon a tender whisper
that’s so quiet it can stun.

Seen a hazy purple moon rise
over oceans made of tea,
picked soft white clouds of cotton
from the branches of a tree.

Listened to the heartbeat
of a rose before it dies,
touched the feather of a phoenix
as it fades before your eyes.

Flown upon a carpet
made of paper edged with lace
landed by a tortoise
with a smile upon it’s face.
 
Now I've tasted all that's fancy
and I've swum within the fun,
wont you dream with me a lifetime
close your eyes, it can be done!
 
 
 
 

 

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  • penman gold member
    September 20, 2008
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    wonderful

    Such a creative poem for the theme. So very random. Congratulations on the silver.


  • bananasfoster42
    September 12, 2008

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    this is the bomb! very random indeed, but paints a wonderful fantasy dream world! flows very nicely.


  • Fallen-Phases
    September 11, 2008

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    Holy Flying monkey!
    this is an amazing poem!!!!!!
    i loves it, great job


  • ronnica
    September 7, 2008

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    A fantastic read,there are some lovely lines here, it is softly dreamy so at odds against the image of the tortoise,


  • Autumn Whisper
    September 7, 2008

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    Brilliant poem Sue, I love the fantasy feel about it, and the rhyming just flowed so perfectly - well done. I loved it.
    Keep up the fabulous work.
    best wishes as always
    Autumn Whisper


  • ProudMomma
    September 7, 2008

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    wow!! very well written. this poem was very cute! Very good imagery and the first words just kept me reading!! Great write hon keep on penning!


  • islekine gold member
    April 18, 2008
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    Thanks for such a wonderful ride!

    This is well penned...and a really fun write!
    Write on!
    *PEACE*


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    April 7, 2008

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    What a fun dream that sounds like! Such a wonderful sense of fun in this! Brought a great big to my face Sue... how fabulous!


  • z etoile
    March 29, 2008
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    Oh how beautiful I loved this one!


  • Swtpoetryman
    March 28, 2008

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    A FINE PIECE, INDEED - SUZY Q!

    THANKS for sharing it with me -and I've done the things below

    Flown upon a carpet
    made of paper edged with lace
    landed by a tortoise
    with a smile upon it’s face.

    He! He! and much more than that on me Yellow Bus, on The Lucky Star, and on me British Walkabout - to mention me latest adventures! LOL!!!

    I've sailed upon the ocean,
    I've made love in the sea,
    I've walk with a sad dodo,
    all the way to Galilee.

    I've lived in a cool castle,
    in the land of Gay Parie,
    I flew up to the tower,
    when I lost the magic key.

    I've danced with a fine woman,
    who set me spirit free,
    and took me home for crumpets,
    sweets and gin and tea.

    I've done so many things,
    that it would take to long to tell,
    so I'll bid you a fine day,
    and a merry fair-the-well.

    Peace & Love!
    Earl.





  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    March 28, 2008

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    This is really just stunning work. Wonderful imagery and the rhyme and flow are amazing. Well done Sue.

    Love
    Wayne Leon
    x


  • moonbumps silver member
    March 28, 2008

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    This was filled with very beautiful things-all of which I would very much love to try! What imagination you have babes-pours out everywhere!! You so inspire me-I am truly beginning to believe you are part of my muse-or am I reaching too high?
    LOve you lots
    Hilly
    xxx


  • SomeonesToySoldier gold member
    March 27, 2008

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    Another great poem. I really like the almost sing-song visuals its great. And as usual your rhyme and ruthm are impecable.

    I just wish that was the kind of things I dream about.


  • DeSiBoO14
    March 27, 2008

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    I tHiNk DaT wAs BeAuTiFuL!!!i LuVd It!!!DaY dReAmIn N iMaGiNin Is WaT i Do BeSt!!!Ur VeRy CrEaTiVe!!!

  • childlike faith
    March 27, 2008

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    I like

    I really like this. It's so lively and well written. I love to daydream. My very favorite thing to do is make imaginary works of art while watching the clouds. For relaxing purposes how good it is to let your mind wander in sweet fantasy land. Thanks for sharing. I love it. childlike faith


  • Corvus Corone
    March 27, 2008

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    A trip to the light fantastic, or even maybe the colour of magic, maybe its the picture but there's a real flavour of Pratchett and Discworld here in this piece. Awesome write xx Sorry I'm not as clever as Jeff and able to comment in verse


  • SpiritMother
    March 27, 2008

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    A beautiful story told of an imaginary time,
    when snowflakes could be kissed and moons were purple haze..Oh how time does fly! Exquistite in form and flow.

  • salsa
    March 27, 2008

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    Thank you so much for writing this. I have read loads of poems on this website which seem only meaningful to the author and I must admit, I have written my fair share of poems like that. But this poem is just a nice read. It's fun and it rhymes and it has a good rythm. It's nothing fancy but it is genuinly nice to read.

  • Bad Bill
    March 27, 2008

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    I've cavorted with a centaur
    and giggled with a ghoul;
    pirouetted with a porpoise
    before I went to school.

    Oh, I've gambled with a gryphon
    and swam in God's right eye,
    but I've never kissed a snowflake--
    maybe I should try!

    I love your charming and clever poem, Sue--it's excellent!

    Bill


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      March 27, 2008
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      If you wish to kiss a snowflake
      please lie down upon your back,
      close your eyes in silence
      when all the worlds turned black
      a tender brush upon your lips
      first one or maybe two
      so cold at first then warmer
      as the kisses come to you.


  • EeyoreUK
    March 27, 2008

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    what a fantastic write the rhyme and flow are both brilliant. Thank you for sharing your talent you are an inspiration


  • Legend silver member
    March 27, 2008
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    Exquisite


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    March 27, 2008

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    You are a master of the rhyming verse!

    I once tried to kiss a snowflake, but got my damn lips stuck to a frozen metal pole!!
    Love the picture!!--Reminds me of my Ex Wife!

  • scoff
    March 27, 2008

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    No box for you.

    You've torn it up and thrown it away with this one. I enjoyed this immensely (because dreaming is what I do best.)


  • cricketjeff gold member
    March 27, 2008

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    Yes I've kissed a snowflake
    And she giggled at the sport
    As we danced on tender whispers
    And behaved as we'd been taught

    Drank the tea from out the oceans
    Saw the Moon in purple haze
    Since I started drinking cider
    I do similar most days...

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