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Please Stay

Time breaks hearts
for space in mind
where thoughts are stole
from thinking of you

where sweetness turns sour

by rotted words

that turn our demise

into endless decay.

Missing, I speak
like a pointed dagger
that pierces my heart
as I lay dying,

whispering your name

[hoping you'll return]

And pressing affections
that can not be attended
lost in love
we're left alone,
abandoned

as echoes linger passion,

 

lonely singing

 

             I love you.

Author notes

...
it's all i can say.

luna-midnight

*hugs* i hope it helps.

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  • Delrondu
    April 12, 2008

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    great write. great use of words. "turn our demise into endless decay". wow. and the bolding of "hoping you'll return" was a very nice touch. really drove it home.


  • Ignis Corpus
    March 30, 2008

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    "As I lay dying,/whispering your name/[hoping you'll return]" those lines really pulled strings at my heart... cause in all honesty... that is what I do... I don't know why... I don't want to... I just can't help it. and the very last two lines really hurts too. Cause I want to say it to him. And I want everything to come out to him... But I can't. Thanks for sharing this personal experience, I wish you the best of luck in this contest.
    Beautifuldisasterxx


  • thejollytinker
    March 27, 2008
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    Oh, for crying out loud...

    Ok, just shoot me. Stephanie, you have a heart as big as a church bell. Stay easy, sis.


  • Unsigned gold member
    March 27, 2008
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    hey steff.....you ok....

    different for you.....good but different...

    Simon


  • Eternally Fallen
    March 27, 2008

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    It is very good...very good.

    And it "sounds" like your talking of losing someone. Though I can't be sure....


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    March 27, 2008
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    Lovely write dear, so tender and sweet.


    Love and peace always,
    mj.

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