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maybe this will help

 

If someone said they loved me,
maybe that would help.
I know no one wants me here,
I'm all by myself.


If someone told me I had a purpose,
maybe that would help.
But everybody hates me here,

so it's hard to love myself.

 

What if I started to cut myself,
maybe that would help.
What if you found me dead one day,
would you call for help?

 

 

Author notes

Option 2: Self Harm

Option: 4) Cutting

"crazy monkey"

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  • DemonicChanel420
    April 29

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    I love this poem, and to be honest, I would give you a trophy for it, but it has already won a couple. Very well written, great job, loved it!

    ~Chanel Renee'


  • movedon
    July 29, 2008

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    Only 2 trophies in the zillions of contests this was entered in?!?!?! Well, I liked it. And for the record, I would call for help.

    Warmest,
    Mylee


  • XXxXBassMeisterxXxX
    July 22, 2008

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    I liked it. I know what it meant. Like cutting could have been teh call for help and how it feels to have nobody seeming to care. it ws truthfully beautifully done.. best of luck.


  • Immortal Obscurity gold member
    July 14, 2008

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    This started off with the potential to be really good, but it seemed to me just a surface-penning. It's just too blunt, too obvious, leaving nothing to the imagination. Thanks for entering.

    Laura


  • sins and sorrow silver member
    July 9, 2008

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    Very sad. I can relate to this a lot!!
    I really liked the repetition!
    Great job!
    Thanks for entering and good luck!


  • XxemohatexX
    June 25, 2008

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    wow

    yah thats what im lookng for and you do have a purpous its poetry keep wrighting you r realy good idk if youll win but you hav a chance


  • storiesuntold gold member
    June 24, 2008

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    Oh this is sad

    It was just a couple of weeks ago their was this young boy in his twenties passed .He was raised around alcohol all his life with a dad that bragged on how much he could consume and today I blame the dad for his young sons doom . I cry for the children who were told they were loved his only friend never left him alone only his young friend drank with him and in time he was gone


  • Play-A-War
    June 24, 2008

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    This was a good write... Expressed emotions well.

    Thanks for entering.

    Good luck in the contest


  • RX-Queen
    June 6, 2008
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    Great write, I sense alot of pain and sadness in this, well done. Thanx for entering and good luck.


  • newnoakua
    May 31, 2008

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    wow, this is really good. Dying for help that never comes... nicely done! Really deep and emotional!

    Best of luck in the contest!


  • Super-GOREgous
    May 30, 2008

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    im shocked this hasnt won anything...maybe cause its short or something....but like i understnd how you feel and stuff so maybe thats why i LIKE IT SOOO MUCH! if only it had more gore and few more extentions this would be PERFECT...Thanks for entering -GOREgous Gore


  • Candy Morphine
    May 24, 2008

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    wow,.

    i love the ending verse...it tied everything together so nicely!!

    well done and all the best for the contest


  • XHollowXEyesX
    May 19, 2008

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    wow. this is an awesome piece of poetry. I cannot believe that you didnt even get a HM from these contests. It was a short write but you expressed so much pain and sadness it was stunning. Alot of depth to this piece. It makes me think so much about what wouldve happened if I did kill myself that day, would they hate me, call me selfish?
    awesome write.
    All the best
    ~Hollow~


  • SaviDropKick.Oi.
    May 7, 2008
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    i love this...it reminds me of well..me
    thnx for entering


  • apbluefairy
    May 5, 2008

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    Wow! I'm so sorry your hurting. But do know this: there are people out there who do love & care for you. Some you have yet to meet, & others you already have. They may have a hard time showing how they love you, but just hang in there. They will come through for you, you'll see. And I do care if someone can't live with life any more & therefore killing them selves in the end. It's hard to think of such things, & that it will get better, but it is better to live the life you have now, then to have no life at all. Isn't it?

    apbluefairy

  • lora1208
    May 5, 2008

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    sad

    this sounds very sad. Like someone was depressed when writing. For that type of work this is a good work. Very good for that category type.


  • alwaysapartofme
    April 19, 2008
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    this is deep

    I would totally help. this is a very good poem and very deep. Keep up the awesome work!


  • raggyann
    April 1, 2008
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    YES I WOULD CALL RIGHT NOW
    THIS IS SAD


  • argyra-potameides
    March 28, 2008

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    Yes

    I would give the morgue a call and let them know they had company coming. If this is how you truly feel I'm sorry. You do have a purpose in life, but no one can tell you what that thing is.. we all have to find them for ourselves. I've felt this way before too, I don't let myself anymore. No worries.. it's only life, it will be over soon enough on its own.


  • xxhoopstar21xx
    March 27, 2008

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    wow!!!!

    Its very short but it very great and moving!!!!!!!!
    I really love the ending!!! I think the title really fits the whole outline of the poem.... Well you did a very good job on this peice... You said alot in just very few words.. Each word saying many things!! GREAT JOB!! KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK!!!!

    -- XXHoopstar21XX

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