Strong wind
Swirling air flow
Flying debris scattered
Circulating destructive path
Homeless
Author notes
This is a cinquain formed poem. Syllable count of 2,4,6,8,2
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your wonderfully perfect to me...
awesome...keep it up please!
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Thanks for reading and commenting. I appreciate it.
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Homeless. That's how I feel right now. Nice poem Charley. Short and devastating. I love it. Great job little buddy.
Guin
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Thanks Guin for reading and commenting always great to hear from ya!!!
Charley
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Inverted, it would even be in the shape of that destructive storm; nevertheless, yours has excellent form. I enjoy cinquains immensely, and I've found it also fun to chain them. Short forms make a nice break from "regular" poetry now and again.
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Thank you for reading and commenting. Why didn't I think of that! Inverting it would be cool and match the topic. I appreciate it. Thanks again
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Excellent
CK, this is such a perfectly penned piece of poetry my friend.
It is sad, at the same time.
Well done.
Keep up with the great work.
Keep on penning.
Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful talents with us.
*S* Cynthia
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Thank you Cynthia for reading and commenting. Always good to hear from you!!
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Oh, I think I have a submission here also, I see the Power of this work. I wish you well in the contest.
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Thank you for reading and commenting. It is greatly appreciated.
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Perfect
Charley, this write is perfect! Your syllable count is spot on, and the descriptions within your write tell the story clearly.The visuals are spot on so the picture painted in the mind of the reader is also clearly seen.While reading your write, i could see the tornado and even hear it in my mind.This tells me [my opinion] that it is a great write. When i can 'see' and 'feel' ones words in a poem, then I know it is a fine write, and this is what happened when i read yours.
I like writing in this form as well, i have a few of my own to post at a lateer date! I am also learning different forms of writing, and enjoying it as well.
So my dear sweet friend this write deserves many yellow clapping dudes, but i can only give you three, so here they are!!!
Keep penning these fine pieces of fantastic reading.You are doing well.
Take care and many blessings to you.
Angel.
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Thank you angel for reading and commenting. I always love your critiques of my poems. I really like this form, short and simple and right to the point. Thanks my friend,
Lots of love,
Charley
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