school was crap
yet you could care less
you yell at me
to clean my mess
you never listen
you never care
i feel like i'm always doing you wrong
with the way you give me that evil stare
i give my opinion
you brush it away
you say i'm too young
to mean what i say
age is only a number
and i'm here to say my part
for teens everywhere
whose parents don't have a heart
i'll continue to make a stand
till my voice is heard long and loud
i'm here to make some justice
and to make my fellow teens proud
A contest entry
- Our Poor Teenage Hearts by PonyPride.
950 points, ended April 21, 2008, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Thanks to PonyPride =)
Comments
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alright poetry speaking, excellent, yet again! This is so true and flowing and perfect. Very passionate and yet simple, WONDERFUL
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This was amazing! You have really captured feelings of teenagers, but you havent made it cliche teenage angst. I loved it, I thought it was wonderful, expecially the last 4 lines, it flowed beautifully. Good luck!
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EXCELLENT work here. This is soo very passionate and true. I feel this everyday of my freaken life. It also has beautiful flow. I will add this to the finalists and then judge more from there. Thank you and good luck
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good poem
i like the feelings this poem touches and you also have used a great descripton of what its like to be a teenager, it has a nice flow too, good luck in the contest and keep writing -Amy
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This is really awesome.
The rhythm is really good...it just flows right along.
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Wow
Wow... Simply wow this poem is awsome in every since of the word. I know exactly how you feel though it seems that im a few years late. I think you did a very good job on this piece, and I would love to see more. ^-^
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