That my earth breathes with your thought
astounds!
It moves my gaze toward the sun
quietly knowing the blood in my veins
holds your essence;
brings me the keys that stimulate
my soul to open to your charms.
It is without fail,
a mystery to me
and yet
here
on the lashes of my heart
your image blinks within my eyes-
a sight so moving
that breath stills chilled night air
as rapture holds passion close.
My tears never wept such joy
until
your reflection mirrored my love for you.
Author notes
Prompt:
2. Love
And the Sun, Lines 12-17
I think of you when I am walking or swimming,
Sitting or standing, I think of you morning and night,
When I cry in the evening, and Oh yes, when I laugh
When I speak to myself and when I remain silent
in my joy and pain. When I think and do not think,
My dear, I'm always thinking of you!
~verses by Leopold Sédar Senghor. Senegal (1906-2001)
A contest entry
- ... Femme Noir...Leopold Senghor by Peteskid.
1000 points, ended April 12, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Very nice love poem Pamela. This is written so well I love the images you create. Thanks for sharing and keep writing.
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You have written another beautiful, mellow verse which captures the sense of Senghor's love poem.
"quietly knowing the blood in my veins
holds your essence"
is such a wonderful image. Good luck in this contest. Peace, Liz
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Wonderful take on the prompt. Loved the flow and the imagery. Good luck and write on. One.
Dez -
Beautifully written indeed,with such passion
I really enjoyed the imagery you gave this poem.
A most lovely take on the prompt well done.
Best of wishes to you
Tony
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ichigosama
it's beautiful!! i loved every part of it. is there someone special that inspired you to write this? if there is make sure to thank him. lovely poem.
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Oh, I loved this entry,
really speaks so vividly. Great take on the prompt, and good luck to you.
Ephiphany
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I like this
The last line is the clincher.
Jim
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Oh yes!! It is that depth of love that leaves us breathless at the very thought of that special one.
Your words capture such and intimacy of emotion with an eloquence that is so beautiful.
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oh! this is kind and tender and cannot fail to touch each reader's heart as it has mine .
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Not bad ...
but I wonder about the "lashes of your heart". Otherwise, it all seems to work seamlessly.
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Such tenderness and depth of expression in these verses; a rich body of imagery and descriptions carrying a message of caring. Thank you for this fine entry into the contest and best of luck in the judging...PK
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