When Day met the Night,
there was a story to tell.
About heavenly Light,
falling in love with Dark Hell.
The Light was nice,
and curtsied when due.
the Dark had no manners,
not a noted a' due.
So when Light found Dark,
she hugged him deep.
Instead he slithered away,
making Light weep.
Dark looked back before he ran,
Seeing Light kneeling and broken down.
Dark ran over and pulled her lips up,
"Upside down goes that frown!"
He snickered and fled,
back down to Hell.
Light blushed and smiled,
leaving as well.
So when Light met Dark,
on that faithful day.
Dark gained a moon,
to lead Light's way.
Author notes
Hehehe, this was fun
A contest entry
- When the Day met the Night by ixtli.
450 points, ended April 16, 2008, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Fun little ryhm..
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I especially enjoyed your beautiful imagery in "Dark gained a moon, to lead Light's way!" What a lovely picture that paints!
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first I would like to tell you that I believe your rhyme is flawless[it is so discretely done , that at first i did not even notice it-the way they say rhyme is supposed to be], and secondly I really enjoyed the little story. Especially liked the part of "turning that frown upside down" It almost gave me a visual of Dark having an impish look on face as he was doing that
Yes, I personify everything in a write [in this one Light and Dark seemed like little people to me] My very best wishes in this contest,and thank you for the smile
reenie
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Thank you so much for your comment! I love to get a person's feedback. Thank you for reading and I'm glad you liked it
First off, yes they are like little kids flirting. It was so adorable that picture I got from the title prompt, I'm so glad it came through!
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Ooh I like this bunches!
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yay, thankies!
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I really like this! I can't choose a favorite part. I enjoyed reading this poem. Good luck and thanks for entering! I like the story line. Lovely!
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hehe, really liked writing this. I might need to go and listen to that song now..haven't heard it.
Thanks! and good luck judging!
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