A suicide bomber pulls the clip.
The image of his five year old daughter embedded in his mind
as flames devour his life, and leave a legacy.
Daddy wanted to leave something good behind for his little girl.
All of us are claiming to be on the side of God,
but if God picked a side I haven’t seen tell.
Shrapnel tunnels itself into a soldier’s leg.
Delirium starts and fever will follow.
A medic arrives with IV and comforting words
Feeling a surreal boldness in the face of fiery rain
Ah, we may not see God in the big picture
But he sure is there in the details
Mercy must be there, in the abstract
Because one more soldier would have gone home in a pine box
If not for the angels among the wreckage
Author notes
I know this may be a bit controversial to some and I apoligize if I've stepped on any toes. It just amazes me how there doesnt seem to be a right answer with this one. And when I say God hasnt picked a side, I dont mean he likes terrorism, but that this war seems to be good people hurting good people and vica versa
A contest entry
- - Wednesday Quickie to Work that Quill - by Desire.
700 points, ended March 29, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
all well meaning critiques are welcome and appreciated
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This is all too real seems to be happening a lot these days. This is a touchy subject for a lot of people, there is always talk about god forgiving you for all your sins when you die, but i'm pretty sure that the bible does say that one cannot take his own life for he will be punished for it, well you know what i think that suicide bombers need to be punished for eternity because there is no way in hell that their actions can be justified in any way. Sorry for the rant, i just get pretty worked up over this subject. Anyway you have written this with great style because you are not judgemental. Excellent piece.
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Mercy must be there, in the abstract...
I think you have a clue here.....I am afraid you hit the nail on the head.....Just thinking God will never chose any side....
No matter how bad your life was on earth...after life you get a chance to make it all up....
Well..just some rambling I guess.....but that's not what I thought of your poem...it is good...and I think it deserved a trophy....
XXJeannette
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Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: Among the wrekage
Oooooooooooooh did You mean wreckage?
Wanted to toss that Your way for clarification
but Love this piece penned
And I Thank You for the Author's Notes too
You took a different approach to the prompt~
Wonderful~
This tugged at Spirit and what a Journey You took the reader on...Felt as if there...Could see the details unfold
Powerful verse seen also felt through Your words
These lines grabbed and pulled~
Shrapnel tunnels itself into a soldier’s leg.
Delirium starts and fever will follow.
A medic arrives with IV and comforting words
Feeling a surreal boldness in the face of firy rain
...the only other question...firy...
did You mean fiery?..Wanted to clarify but I thought You meant fiery so took it as such
Fantastic take on the prompt~
Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit!
Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
**Judging will be done shortly...
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Thank you, Desire for taking the time to really scrutinize the poem. And thank you for showing me my mistakes! I swear I ran this through spell check a couple different times but i guess somehow with all the writing and rewriting and copying and pasting... somehow I misspelled some stuff.
I'll fix those things now.
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I don't think God takes sides he is on all of our sides. It is people that twist him into what they want. I don't think God would want anyone to strap a bomb on themselves and blow up innocent people. To me anyone that believes that he would want that are warped. This is an excellent poem
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Your right Huntress, I dont think God would want anyone to strap a bomb on themselves and take innocent lives either. But the people doing it think they are doing it for God and for their families. And they DO leave behind a legacy the same way a fallen soldier leaves behind a leagacy on our side. Thats why its so crazy and sad... and yes I also agree that God is on all of our sides. Well put! Thanks for your comment, you had some excellent points.
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touching
i really like the take on the promt, i like how you say that we all claim to be good on god's side, because sometimes they say this war is a relgious one, and that is so true, that the people on both sides think that they are doing what God thinks is right, well i do belive in God, and we all have our diffent point of views, and our differnt religions, i wish you the best of luck in your contest, i really like how you descibe such a heart touching issue in this poem, keep writing, -Amy
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This is just damn wonderful.
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I dont see why this should be controversial at all. Why cant gods role be criticized in war??
As for the piece I like it and I find these lines powerful and the most important part of the piece
"Ah, we may not see God in the big picture
But he sure is there in the details". Religion is something that almost anyone will fight over..whether they believe or not.
Thanks for sharing this, I found the first paragraph to be very interesting as well. Thought provoking in many ways..love for ones children, wanting to prove your worth and competence and pride in the eyes of your child....one persons wrong, is another persons right.
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How do we justify or vindicate those who die in conflicts that have little or no meaning? They carry meaning because we are so selfish and prejudice. No one would kill themselves to prove a point, and yet others would argue that they would, to be something, a martyr and then become a saint. I am of the ilk that simple conversation exposes so many things about a person, religion, or movement. They are inclined to believe that violence gets people's attention. Yes it does, and provokes more violence. This world is full of those who would overthrow this or that to have a great nation for God or man. None of that ever happens. We just keep using the same methods expecting a different result. Insanity. Quit!!!! Not your best work, but it caught my attention. I'm not convinced you were really into this one. Why? Because I should bleed myself as I read. It just didn't get there or to that point. I'm not saying I would have carried the day any better. You have a great gift and this is not putting the piece down, this is me saying you can break me with more force RC
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