I'm the inner light that guides you
Sometimes I try to talk to you
There are times you ignore
Some times we communicate well
You can not see me
I'm there with you daily
The more you hurry the less you listen
When you are quiet and the mind is still
We are one
This is when true change starts
When you let the inner light to guide you
Then we finally become who we were meant to be
A contest entry
- Let's Think About Light by The Poetic Bandits.
900 points, ended April 23, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I like the way you have personalised the inner light and the questioning between the lines, approach...this was great, you really pulled me in as I was reading, and it all comes together in the last stanza with a good message...thank you
~Lilac
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In the last line of the first stanza, you have 'sometimes' as two words instead of one... apart from that I really like the way this poem comes together in the end - brilliant! Good luck in the contest!
Keep writing
Polly
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Think we know about that inner light, just not sure where it comes from. Liked the flow and the message you share in these lines.
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Wow, this was a really great poem. I liked the first and third stanzas best. I feel like I could connect to this. Great work, keep writing.
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B~
This is amazing!! Wow! What a great job on this one! There is nothing to critique, it is perfect! Perfectly said, and typed and everything!
And the message is wonderful!!!
Best of luck in this contest!
and much love
Nyetta
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