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Wednesday's evening shadows fall

Missing image

 

 

and the essence of knowing
all that should be seen
becomes easier:
but I can let slip certain surprises

tied to marrow and sinews
that stretch my diaphragm.
striated muscle layers
whoosh past valves and push on
to the thrum and thump of life.

waiting to hear
the rustle of magpies,
sparrows collect against
ribs; wing tips scratch at my door,

they coo and coo- saying
open; unfold now
go on and race; spin
and dive,
do not waste seconds
or minutes.
O' botheration of nuances
that makes me a woman,

loses body positive thoughts,
in my head I am somewhere
other than on the outside
under this thickness of skin,

there is still a girl,waiting
to escape


one day
with the birds, bees
and things that sing
inside this book of days.

 

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  • Dalaney gold member
    April 2

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    Congrats on your win...
    I am in the company of two
    very very fine writers.

    This poem is exceptional.

    Love, Lane

  • Virgoan
    April 2

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    An exceptional piece...made me stop for a while, look (realize and grasp) and listen (with eyes close)...excellent write.

    Keep writing and sharing such wonderful pieces.

    HENSLEY


  • Lucy. gold member
    March 30

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    'O' botheration of nuances
    that makes me a woman,'
    and
    'there is still a girl,waiting
    to escape'
    I love it all, but these lines especially. Very nice.

  • 'A child of the universe'

    I found this one more challenging for some reason. I'm reminded of 'the child' in us all, not as an infant but as a return to our original true nature.
    A soul, feeling burdened by 'body' and circumstance, too much to take proper flight towards its vision of ultimate beauty. But I believe it can.
    May all the best visions be made real for you, even while appreciating, your still having a body.
    I am also still suspecting, that I have possibly missed some connections with the imagery. Would be interested to hear your response on 'my take' on it?


    • NurseChilly gold member
      March 28
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      we are all still children inside, which brings reminders of hang-ups from early years, that still like to hang on in my later life, silly, I know... but women are like that..

      but yes, you got the vibe of it well and you appreciate the needs to have both physical and also spiritual body..


  • Zayra Yves gold member
    March 28

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    Ah, this is gorgeous...love the line about a girl waiting to escape. I also love your use of "book of days" since that one is not easy to use.

    I need to get serious about my writing again. I read things like this and I think "shit zayra, snap the fuck out of that funka dunk!" You are an inspiration Gill. I think I am going to go fall in love with Betty Page too.

    And, in the heck is everyone changing up their front pages? I am lost!


  • pangur ban
    March 27

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    Never lose touch with the little girl inside -- she will keep you alive when the botheration of nuances threaten to overwhelm. Gorgeous write Gil! Good luck with the contest! Ta - Helen

  • Wandika gold member
    March 27
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    Book of Days

    So apropos for your book title.

    Go Gil!

    Jim


  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    March 27

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    This is such a gentle push in the direction of positive. We always wait, don't we? Even when we say we are done Those little birds are relentless in their hope and desire for better days to add to the book.

    Loverly, my Gillian.

    I have on my pink boots, and a pink shirt under my work shirt (it even shows) and I am thinking of you today.




  • Rowan gold member
    March 27

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    A woman wouldn't be a woman without the 'botheration of nuances', and the ability to see the little girl inside that still dreams that anything is possible. Thank you Gill, for making me hush the world, and listen to that hopeful voice. I forget sometimes how lost she can become without me.
    Love ya girlfriend. My thoughts are with you today.
    In pink,
    Kathleen


  • "O' botheration of nuances
    that makes me a woman,"

    love that phrase


  • Yvette Champ
    March 27
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  • Peteskid gold member
    March 26

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    when we talk to ourselves it is suspect behaviour, but most do it anyway; when we listen to ourselves i think we can approach understanding or wisdom; this seems like someone is listening...well done here ...PK


    • NurseChilly gold member
      March 27
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      yes, time to listen and take stock of known quietude

      tis all good

  • misselaineous gold member
    March 26

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    this strikes as a journey poem
    a moving on and a remembering all at once
    a thankful poem
    and a yearning

  • grm
    March 26

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    on how many levels do i see and recognize an evolution here, Gilly?
    there's a skin-scrape rawness here i haven't noticed in your work before, and despite its shadowy implications, i find it becomes you...as a woman, as well as an artist.

    this piece appeals to my darker nature, the one i can dress up, paint a happy face on, take out to see the sights, but can never get entirely rid of---which you know of, first-hand, lol---but of what i know, or think i know, i surely know that this is one incredible piece of writing.

    i could say i enjoyed this write, but, with its obvious pain, it would be like saying i enjoyed a late-in-life circumcision or a punch in the nads by some well-wishing former flame.

    be that as it may, i can only say you are one accomplished writer/artist/woman/person, and that this write proves me right.

    and if you EVER ask me to turn my head and cough, i most certainly will report you to my liefie girl



    keep on keepin on, Gilly



    • NurseChilly gold member
      March 26
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      It's funny Guy, as I don't find this painful, just a little bit of aching, with certain things happening in my life... but there isn't sadness..

      but the laugh i got about jabbing you in the nuts made me giggle and I'm sure Nicci will giggle too... lolol

      evolution is good, it means doors are opening and I'm not slamming them back in my own face...

      time to move, is forwards... not assbackwards ...

      thankie Guy
      • grm
        March 26
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        oh...and it's pronounced 'bassackwards'

      • grm
        March 26
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        always best to be linear than circular, hon
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