Here I stand, alone
Masking myself from the rest of the world
I am, an empty heart
An empty mind
An empty soul
Just another statistic moving into a vast dungeon of nothingness
Staring to the skies, seeing nothing but ill-lighted clouds
Removing any hope for tomorrow
Yet I pray for some sort of stairway leading my spirits upward
Only to find that they all just sent me spiraling down to a deep, deeper, deepest pit of depression
My mind became suppressed by the harsh facts of reality
However my heart knows better, wants better, and is determined to receive better
So I pack my bags and venture off into a land unknown
Following a map that reads heart, mind and soul
Traveling past apathy, agony, and anxiety
No red lights are ahead
No traffic jams present to slow me down
I go where there is no path leaving a trace of beauty behind me
Throwing fear, failure, and despair out of the window
Breathing in peace which consumes my inner being
Making only one stop at a trade shop
Where I traded in my contentness for new found happiness
Heading into a field of renewal
Where the clouds up above pour down a flood of hope
Cleansing me from all impurities
The sound of harmony absorbs me
As I put together the pieces of my soul
My heart now dances to the tune
Replaying over and over again in my mind
As my mind puts that music into an instrument which sounds so sweet
It empowered me to unmask myself only to see,
That I love being the new and improved me
Author notes
I hope you all enjoy this!
A contest entry
- Tell me a Story by TabbyJoy.
750 points, ended April 2, 2008, 44 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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a very enjoyable read , very good work this is interestingly diferent from what you used to write, thank you fo rsharing and keep up the good work i hope that all is well with you
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oh sorry i meaning to give u applause with the other comment i sent. just over look i. ~smiles a bit~ so here they are right now
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that is SOOOOOO GOOOOD
the writing you did here was just excellent.you have a good messenge,that i see here, the messenge to never give up,keep going forward and don't look bac.to me this writing of yours its musical. the right chosen words it flows like a river, smooth i enjoyed this alot. you did a AWESOME job on it. in every part of this piece. keep it up. -
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Awwwwwww! Thank you so much! It has been hard for me to do this but I'm glad that I have. And I'm even more that you enjoyed this piece! Thanks for the comment!
~DarkChildsKiss~
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bravo
Ah, marvelous and stiring piece of poetry full of bright and uplifting images, so very full of Hope! A fine poem! I loved it! bravo.... bravo... bravo...
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It means a lot to me if you like it!
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What happended to Mr Clappy? Here he is! This was a wonderful read! I was blessed by it! Love ya lots,
Momma~
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I'm trying but it is harder to write this way. But thanks for everything mommy!
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That's one hell of a journey baby girl but is sounds like it has been worth the trip and you sound so much more mature and sure of yourself... dumping the old crap and accepting the new. Don't take less than what you are worht my girl which is more than you can dream! I am glad to see you writing and I am so much more to see hope and light within your write instead of darness and despiar! I hope you continue on this road! It will bring sunny days and smiles! All my love my sweet baby girl!
Huggles,
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i liked it, but the lack of punctuation in some spots confused me.
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Thanks, and I see what you mean. I'm bad about that too. But I am glad that you liked it in spite of this fact.
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Wow! That is a great write! Nicely done! Glad to see something new by you! And good luck to you!
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I'm glad to be able to write something new. lol. Thank you for reading. You have been a great friend to me!
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Liberating. Thanks for the entry.
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No thank you for hosting this contest!
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this is really impressive...it holds a lot of emotion to it and I enjoyed reading it a lot....I think that this would be a great piece for those seeking self-approval in their lives and hope...
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Thanks for reading! I'm glad to hear that. I would love to share my story with others so I can tell them from personal experience how being depressed doesn't help any situation.
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bravo
this was most excellent piece.. i love the fact that you have cleansed your heart, soul, and mind... keep it up...
Yvonne
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Yeah I finally got fed up with being down all of the time. So now I'm starting over. Thanks for reading!
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You may want to change hearts to heart in the twelth line. It's a nice write. A wonder story of self renewal. It's surprizing howmany invisible masks the world wears. So many fake smiles just to keep going. It would be nice to shed all the bad and start over.
Good luck in the contest.
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I noticed that to two seconds before I read your comment. Thanks for that and for reading my work. I appreciate it!
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This piece was emotional. detailed, and beautiful. I think that many can relate to it. However,there were a few gramatical/spelling errors (if you want me to help you located them, I'll try when I have more time). Otherwise, this was a delightful piece about self improvement. Keep up the great work and good luck in the contest!
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You were definietly right about the typos. I wrote two different versions and my silly self ended up mixing them together which is why there are so many typos. But as you might remember I have always been the Queen of Typos. lol. Thanks for reading and I'm glad to know that you enjoyed it!
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Welcome Back and with a Bang!! Wow! What a powerful read, and a wonderful one at that!! This is just amazing!! I love every word of this one!!
Best of luck in this contest!!
and love
The All Knowing Mommy
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Awww! Thank you so much! I'm glad that someone liked this and especially glad that the someone was you!
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